Talk:Black Water (memoir)/GA1

Latest comment: 10 months ago by Frzzl in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Frzzl (talk · contribs) 21:17, 6 January 2024 (UTC)Reply


Hi Significa liberdade - this article peaked my interest because Native American culture really interests me as a Brit. However, I'm sorry, but I have to fail this review simply because the article seems incomplete, failing good article criterion 3. It's 612 words long at the time of writing, and half of that is the plot summary. Broadly, before re-nomination, here's what's needed:

  1. The lead is almost non-existent.
  2. Move Background above plot. A much more in depth biography of Robertson is needed to give the reader context; I would aim for around 150-200 words. A few sentences on the history of Native American rights in Canada and of the Cree nation could also be beneficial.
  3. The plot needs a copyedit to be a bit more cohesive; it contains analysis, which it really shouldn't. I'd aim for 400-500 words, honestly more if you have the book to hand.
  4. The "Style" section either needs large expansion into a full "Analysis" section, or merging into "Reception". There's no point of having a section that's two sentences long.
  5. Split the Awards bit into its own section/subsection.

When I was checking whether this article really did cover all the literature concerning it, I thought that I should collate some reliable sources for you to extend the article. From the amount I found, at least a doubling in length is reasonable; 1300 words doesn't seem like a bad target.

Sources about Robertson and the book itself that seem helpful (apologies if any have already been used):

Apologies, but happy editing -  Frzzl  talk; contribs  21:17, 6 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

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