Talk:Black Water (memoir)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Frzzl (talk · contribs) 21:17, 6 January 2024 (UTC)

Hi Significa liberdade - this article peaked my interest because Native American culture really interests me as a Brit. However, I'm sorry, but I have to fail this review simply because the article seems incomplete, failing good article criterion 3. It's 612 words long at the time of writing, and half of that is the plot summary. Broadly, before re-nomination, here's what's needed:

1. The lead is almost non-existent.
2. Move Background above plot. A much more in depth biography of Robertson is needed to give the reader context; I would aim for around 150-200 words. A few sentences on the history of Native American rights in Canada and of the Cree nation could also be beneficial.
3. The plot needs a copyedit to be a bit more cohesive; it contains analysis, which it really shouldn't. I'd aim for 400-500 words, honestly more if you have the book to hand.
4. The "Style" section either needs large expansion into a full "Analysis" section, or merging into "Reception". There's no point of having a section that's two sentences long.
5. Split the Awards bit into its own section/subsection.

When I was checking whether this article really did cover all the literature concerning it, I thought that I should collate some reliable sources for you to extend the article. From the amount I found, at least a doubling in length is reasonable; 1300 words doesn't seem like a bad target.

Sources about Robertson and the book itself that seem helpful (apologies if any have already been used):

• Cormack, Jude (2023-04-28). "Book Review of Robertson, David A. (2020). Black Water: Family, Legacy and Blood Memory. Toronto: HarperCollins Publishers". Canadian Journal of Family and Youth / Le Journal Canadien de Famille et de la Jeunesse. 15 (3): 271–275. doi:10.29173/cjfy29940. ISSN 1718-9748.
• Soriano, Drew (2023-01-01). "Book Review of Robertson, David A. (2020). Black Water: Family, Legacy and Blood Memory. Toronto: HarperCollins Publishers". Canadian Journal of Family and Youth / Le Journal Canadien de Famille et de la Jeunesse. 15 (2): 75–79. doi:10.29173/cjfy29873. ISSN 1718-9748.
• Barnes, Mary (2021-08-26). "Black Water: Family, Legacy, and Blood Memory by David A. Robertson – Prairie Fire: a Canadian Magazine of New Writing". Prairie Fire. Retrieved 2024-01-06.
• Priegert, Portia (2020-08-24). "David A. Robertson". Galleries West. Retrieved 2024-01-06.
• "Award-Winning Author David A. Robertson Appointed Editorial Director of New Imprint at Tundra Book Group". Penguin Random House Canada. 2022-09-27. Retrieved 2024-01-06.
• "David A. Robertson (2022)". UC Davis School of Education. 2022-10-25. Retrieved 2024-01-06.
• Downey, Crystal (2023-01-01). "Book Review of Robertson, David A. (2020). Black Water: Family, Legacy and Blood Memory. Toronto: HarperCollins Publishers Ltd". Canadian Journal of Family and Youth / Le Journal Canadien de Famille et de la Jeunesse. 15 (1): 180–184. doi:10.29173/cjfy29886. ISSN 1718-9748.
• Zhu, Eva (2021-05-21). "David A. Robertson wins two 2021 Manitoba Book Awards for memoir Black Water". CBC. Retrieved 2024-01-06.

Apologies, but happy editing -  Frzzl  talk; contribs  21:17, 6 January 2024 (UTC)

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