Talk:Body and Soul (Joe Jackson album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 14:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
I'll be remembering you reviewing this
Infobox and lead
edit- At File:JoeJacksonBodyAndSoul.jpg, you might want to present a better source than Discogs, which is user-generated; this one, which is from the External links section
- Where is it stated in the body of the article that the album was recorded in January 1984
- Length isn't mentioned in the body
- Following MOS:LEAD, the lead shouldn't have references; rather, it should summarize the body of the article, and the body itself should have references
- "Body and Soul is an album by Joe Jackson, released in March 1984.[3] The album was Jackson's seventh studio album, and his first fully digital project. In the UK it peaked at No. 14," > "Body and Soul is the seventh studio album by English singer-songwriter Joe Jackson, released on 14 March 1984 by A&M Records. Jackson's first fully digital project, it peaked at No. 14 in the UK,"
- The Professional ratings template should be after the first paragraph of Release and reception, and "Allmusic" should be "AllMusic"
Production
edit- Retitle to Background and production
- "first discussing it over sushi" – why is it relevant to mention that they were eating sushi, and what exactly does this sentence mean? Were they discussing it while they were eating sushi (which would be "first discussing it while eating sushi"), or did the discussion have a higher priority than the sushi they were eating (which would be "first discussing it rather than discussing the sushi they were eating")?
- "the soundtrack of Mike's Murder," > the soundtrack of Mike's Murder,
Release and reception
edit- "The album was" > "Body and Soul was"
- Where is Body and Soul mentioned at ref 13
- "Shewey was less impressed with the" > "However, the writer was less positive regarding the"
- "which sounded to him like an Elvis Costello track from the Get Happy!! project (1980)." > "which he compared to musician Elvis Costello's tracks from the album Get Happy!! (1980)."
- "Shewey thought Jackson's [...] was "a bracing," > "Shewey praised Jackson's [...] for its "bracing,"
- "published a glowing review, characterizing" > "characterized" for neutrality
- "On the other hand," – this is possibly a cliché, so change it to "However,"
Musical style
edit- This section should be before Release and reception
- File:Joe Jackson - 1984 - Loisaida sample.mp3 has a good-looking rationale
- "an alcoholic attorney making good." – making good? What does that mean
Track listing
edit- Looks good
Personnel
edit- Needs a source
Charts
edit- The refs should be alongside the numbers, not the chart names
References
edit- Copyvio score looks ok
- Cite AllMusic as publisher on ref 1
- Replace Allmusic.com on ref 5 with AllMusic
- On ref 12, change Grammy.com to Grammy and cite it as publisher
- Cite Official Charts as publisher on ref 13
External links
edit- Looks good
Overall
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The article does have its amount of problems but is still close to GA. Wetrorave (talk) 14:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Okay I have performed a bunch of fixes. Sushi removed, refs shifted from lead paragraph to body, some text added to body to satisfy LEAD. I beefed up the touring paragraph and gave it its own section. I moved discussion of the artwork down into its own section and expanded it somewhat. I think "making good" is can be kept: it appears in the dictionary.[1]
- How we lookin' now? Binksternet (talk) 21:18, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- It's lookin' good now Binksternet, and there's additional changes too. Seems like a nice ✓ Pass to me. Wetrorave (talk) 04:17, 9 July 2021 (UTC)