Talk:Bronze Statuette of Athletic Spartan Girl

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In the first sentence of the “Female athletic costume in ancient Greece” section you say that the chiton is “affixed to the right shoulder leaving the right shoulder and breast bare.” This doesn’t really make sense, do you mean leaving the left shoulder and breast bare?
In the second paragraph of the “Female athletic costume in ancient Greece” I like how you switch to discussing a different example of one of these figurines, however it was a bit confusing/unclear. I would maybe try and give more specific details/background information about the two different figurines in addittion to which museum they currently can be found in if possible. Also, if you can I would try to discuss the two figurines with equal detail.
In the “Athletic Spartan Women” section you do a great job discussing female athleticism in Sparta, however I would try to directly tie this discussion to the statuettes you are discussing and how they are representative of typical spartan female athletes to make this information more obviously relevant to your topic.
If possible, I would consider trying to add more detail about the uses of these statuettes and who made them. What kinds of cauldrons were they put on? How many statuettes are in existence? Is it known whether or not just one artist made them, or if it was simply a common style among spartan artists at the time?
Other than a few grammatical mistakes, this is a really solid page and you do a really good job describing the bronze statuettes of athletic spartan girls and their connection to athletics in Ancient Greece. I would just add a few more details here and there, but overall great job!!

Comments from Prof. Paga

Latest comment: 6 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion

Hi Maria - this is a great start to your article! In addition to the excellent comments from your peer-reviewer, here are a few suggestions of my own.

Consider adding a map that shows where Sparta / Laconia is located.
There seems to be a disconnect between your description of the British Museum statuette and the actual image. In the description, you say her breast is not exposed, but the statue certainly looks like it is.
Make sure to proofread carefully. For instance, your title needs to be plural, not singular.
Consider making your final 2 sections independent sections (not subsections, as currently). This will give your article a more clear organization.

Jpaga (talk) 18:58, 1 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

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