Talk:Coriolanus Snow/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Riley1012 (talk · contribs) 18:34, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

Hello! I will review this article within the next week. -Riley1012 (talk) 18:34, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

1. Well-written

• Snow is influenced by Dr. Gaul's view of state control as necessity to prevent disorder. Should be "as a necessity"
• Snow reunites with Lucy Gray and they start a relationship... Add a comma before "and"
• He pursues her through the woods and she leaves a snake to attack him. Add a comma before "and"
• In Mockingjay, Snow directs the Capitol's military campaign to quash revolution in the Districts... Add "the" before "revolution"
• Instead she shoots rebellion leader Alma Coin... Add a comma after "Instead"
• He is a fascist and a totalitarian dictator who aims to crush revolution. Add "the" before "revolution" since we are discussing the specific revolution from the book/series.
• In his view, however, Lucy Gray betrays him and he becomes a colder character. Add a comma before "and"
• Snow believes Peeta loves Katniss but she does not reciprocate;... Add a comma before "but"
• Pavia was unclear which character the audience were supposed to support... Should be "was" instead of "were"
• Miller found his perspective tiring in the middle of the book, but praised... Remove the comma after "book" (or add "she" after "but")
• ...Mockingjay – Part 2 neglects other characters to focus on rivalry between Katniss and Snow... Add "the" before "rivalry"
  • All done, with "that"s added in Snow believes that Peeta loves Katniss, but that she does not reciprocate (it's not "Snow believes Peeta loves Katniss; in reality, Katniss does not reciprocate"). — Bilorv (talk) 18:03, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

2. Verifiable
Plot summaries don't require citations per WP:PLOTSOURCE. The sources used are reliable.

• Earwig's Copyvio check similarities just for repeating the title of the books/movies and the quote "It's the things we love most that destroy us" - this is not a cause for concern. But the top similar link is reference 13, and there are a couple of identical phrases that should be reworded to avoid copyright violations.

• "This left him with bloody sores in his mouth" and "Grandma'am grows roses on the roof of their penthouse" should be reworded.
  • Yep, done. — Bilorv (talk) 18:03, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

• Spot check:

• No issues: 1, 5, 7 (per WP:RSPYT, YouTube videos from verified channels of reliable sources can be used), 8, 11, 14, 17, 20, 21, 24, 26, 28, 30, 35, 41, 43

3. Broad

• The Hunger Games trilogy section notes notable differences between the books and films. Are there any notable differences in the movie adaptation of The Ballad of Songbirds and Snakes?
  • Nothing that critics commented on. There's a huge difference in The Hunger Games (for various reasons covered in the article) whereas Ballad is a very direct adaptation. The main beats covered in "Character history" are the same. — Bilorv (talk) 18:03, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

4. Neutral
The article is neutral in its coverage of the character.

5. Stable
This article is stable day-to-day.

6. Illustrated
The images in the article qualify for fair use and have relevant captions. Wish there was a higher-quality image for Blythe, but there isn't one in the Commons yet.

@Riley1012: Thanks for the review! I think I've responded to all the points above—let me know if there's anything more to be done. — Bilorv (talk) 18:03, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

@Bilorv: Everything looks good now. I will pass, well done! -Riley1012 (talk) 21:11, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.