Talk:D. Djajakusuma/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   "to a noble, government-employee father and his wife" -> consider rephrasing this; as is "noble" seems to be used as a generic adjective ("he is noble and grand") rather than specifically stating he's a member of the nobility.
   Reworded. It had originally been linked
   "As a child he enjoyed watching films and stage performances, at times sneaking out of his home after curfew to watch performances" -> repetition of "performances". Try "productions" for the first one instead.
   Done, ish.
   "despite his parents hopes" -> missing possessive
   Done
   "which were considered not compliant with the need for modernisation" -> try "incompatible" rather than "not compliant"
   Sounds good
   "garnered him best director at the first FFI in 1954" -> "garnered him the award for best director at the first FFI in 1954"
   Done
   "Djajakusuma's later film Bimo Kroda won Best Director at the 1967" -> surely he, and not the film, won the award.
   How's this?
   

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

   Grand.

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

   Yep.

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   Not a problem.

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

   Looks good.

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Suitable and well-used; little rough but well worth having.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Shouldn't take a lot of work here; holding for seven days (doubt it'll be that long though :P). GRAPPLE X 00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

   Seven minutes, maybe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:41, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

   It's almost like you saw this one coming. GRAPPLE X 00:54, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

   • Or a fortunate overlap of time zones. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:57, 24 October 2012 (UTC)