Talk:Danton Heinen

Latest comment: 3 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Shall review MWright96 (talk) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League   Done
  • junior hockey can be wikilinked to Junior ice hockey   Done
  • "Heinen earned NCHC Rookie of the Year in 2014–15 and NCHC Forward of the Year in 2015-16." - please specify that the years highlighted in bold are seasons   Done
  • The above dashes in the seasons can be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH   Done
  • Maybe add briefly Heinen's senior ice hockey career to date   Done

Early career

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  • Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League   Done
  • "While with the Sockeyes in the 2012–13 season, he recorded 63 points" - The Abbotsford News does not mention his points total but Elite Prospects does   Done

Collegiate

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  • Dup link for Denver Pioneers men's ice hockey   Done
  • I think the terms goals and assists can be wikilinked to their respective articles   Done
  • "entry-level contract with the Boston Bruins" - how many years would the entry-level contract last for?   Done

Boston Bruins

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  • Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting   Done
  • "in seven of the team's nine games." - little bit too close to the source material   Done
  • "Heinen was selected for th 2017 AHL All-Star Game" - the word highlighted in bold is a typo   Done
  • "He played three games with the Providence Bruins before being recalled on October 26, 2017," - maybe add Heinen scored three assist during his three-game period with the Providence Bruins   Done
  • "described as having a "200-foot game." - described by whom?
    • MWright96 It says on a third line head coach Bruce Cassidy described as having a "200-foot game." Should I re-word this?
  • "He was also a healthy scratch" - what does this mean?   Done
  • "for two games in October and again the first week of February." - wording of this portion of text is too close to the original source material   Done

Anaheim Ducks

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  • Wikilink free agent to the appropriate article   Done

Pittsburgh Penguins

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  • "After attending their training camp," - needs verifying with a reliable source   Done
  • Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting   Done
  • "and he scored his first goal as a Penguin that same night" - don't think the text highlighted in bold is encyclopedic   Done

References

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  • The title of Reference 11 "FINALISTS NAMED FOR NCHC INDIVIDUAL AWARDS" should not be in all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS   Done
  • Reference 45's title "A cup full of spoiler: Penguins blitz champion Lightning, 6-2, in season opener without stars" should contain a en dash where the hyphen is bolded per MOS:DASH   Done

Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the above points MWright96 (talk) 17:15, 23 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

MWright96, is it better? HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:58, 28 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Quite better. Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)Reply