Talk:Danton Heinen/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

Shall review MWright96 (talk) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League  Done
• junior hockey can be wikilinked to Junior ice hockey  Done
• "Heinen earned NCHC Rookie of the Year in 2014–15 and NCHC Forward of the Year in 2015-16." - please specify that the years highlighted in bold are seasons  Done
• The above dashes in the seasons can be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH  Done
• Maybe add briefly Heinen's senior ice hockey career to date  Done

Early career

• Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League  Done
• "While with the Sockeyes in the 2012–13 season, he recorded 63 points" - The Abbotsford News does not mention his points total but Elite Prospects does  Done

Collegiate

• Dup link for Denver Pioneers men's ice hockey  Done
• I think the terms goals and assists can be wikilinked to their respective articles  Done
• "entry-level contract with the Boston Bruins" - how many years would the entry-level contract last for?  Done

Boston Bruins

• Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting  Done
• "in seven of the team's nine games." - little bit too close to the source material  Done
• "Heinen was selected for th 2017 AHL All-Star Game" - the word highlighted in bold is a typo  Done
• "He played three games with the Providence Bruins before being recalled on October 26, 2017," - maybe add Heinen scored three assist during his three-game period with the Providence Bruins  Done
• "described as having a "200-foot game." - described by whom?
  • MWright96 It says on a third line head coach Bruce Cassidy described as having a "200-foot game." Should I re-word this?
    • Struck MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
• "He was also a healthy scratch" - what does this mean?  Done
• "for two games in October and again the first week of February." - wording of this portion of text is too close to the original source material  Done

Anaheim Ducks

• Wikilink free agent to the appropriate article  Done

Pittsburgh Penguins

• "After attending their training camp," - needs verifying with a reliable source  Done
• Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting  Done
• "and he scored his first goal as a Penguin that same night" - don't think the text highlighted in bold is encyclopedic  Done

References

• The title of Reference 11 "FINALISTS NAMED FOR NCHC INDIVIDUAL AWARDS" should not be in all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS  Done
• Reference 45's title "A cup full of spoiler: Penguins blitz champion Lightning, 6-2, in season opener without stars" should contain a en dash where the hyphen is bolded per MOS:DASH  Done

Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the above points MWright96 (talk) 17:15, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

MWright96, is it better? HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:58, 28 October 2021 (UTC)

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Quite better. Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)