Talk:Deafness in Japan

Initial feedback

Great work, Ren! I love that you've included JSL, signed Japanese, and Mikayubo SL. Keep it up! Matthall.research (talk) 13:52, 13 September 2022 (UTC)

Also, it occurs to me that you've accomplished all this in a VERY short time, since having to switch your region of interest: extra impressive! Matthall.research (talk) 17:30, 13 September 2022 (UTC)

Language Emergence section

Excellent work! The current version would score at or near the "exemplary" end of the scale. Matthall.research (talk) 15:12, 21 September 2022 (UTC)

Initial graded feedback:

One of the best sections I've seen in anyone's article - truly exemplary!

Current score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 23:15, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Significant Organizations

You're absolutely crushing this! This is a 3/3, hands-down: I have no recommendations for improvement. Matthall.research (talk) 15:13, 21 September 2022 (UTC)

Initial graded feedback:

Once again, I have no recommendations for improvement! I personally disagree with whoever suggested that the timeline might be better as prose than as a list, but the the wiki community can settle that; it's not going to affect your grade.

Current score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 23:16, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

EHDI section

Clearly this is not in its final form, but I saw a few things I wanted to respond to.

I'm confused by the first sentence, especially given the citation! Yes, native signers (of any sign language) learn that language from birth: that's what it means to be a "native signer". In most places in the world, very few people are native signers. The exceptions are people who are born to Deaf signing parents or into shared-signing communities.

I doubt that any shared-signing communities have early intervention systems: those are typically administered on national scales. Matthall.research (talk) 21:52, 6 October 2022 (UTC)

Human & Civil Rights section

Initial graded feedback:

To me, this is also exemplary. However, I see that a wikipedian has indiciated that this might be *too much* detail. I'm not going to penalize you for that, but if you wanted to improve the section, summarizing at a slightly more general level would be good.

Current score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 23:18, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Primary & Secondary Education

Final graded feedback:

Another meticulously-researched and clearly-written section: great work! There are a few places where the citation is provided later than I'd like, but the reader will be able to figure it out.

Score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 22:43, 6 December 2022 (UTC)

Higher Education section

Final graded feedback:

Very nice! In the context of the rest of the article, this section feels under-developed... but that's only because of how incredibly extensive the rest of your work is!

Score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 22:45, 6 December 2022 (UTC)

Employment

Final graded feedback:

One potential error here: when I read the source you cite about the availability of jobs as JSL interpreters, I'm fairly certain that those jobs are for hearing people. Deaf Interpreters do exist in some parts of the world, so it's possible that that's what's being described here, but if that were true I would expect the source to say so quite clearly, which is does not.

Otherwise good!

Score: 2.5/3 Matthall.research (talk) 22:49, 6 December 2022 (UTC)