Talk:DecembeRadio/GA1

Latest comment: 16 years ago by Zeagler in topic GA Review

GA Review

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  • Oh wow...really cool pic. You're lucky. :)
    • Thank you. I'm fortunate that the band is willing to work with me on this stuff. —Zeagler (talk)
  • First paragraph of lead needs work. The last sentence implies that you've mentioned the original lineup somewhere, but it seems you haven't. (well, you have next paragraph, but it should be from the start...)
  • "to take up guitar, as well" - you haven't said what else he played prior to this
    • Sorry, I meant that he took up guitar in addition to Josh Reedy. Changed to make it clear that Reedy played "Johnny B. Goode" on guitar. —Zeagler (talk)
  • "Noise is a self-produced album of praise and worship covers on which each band member contributes at least two lead vocals,[9] and Dangerous contains nine original songs and a cover of "Are You Gonna Go My Way" by Lenny Kravitz." - put these in past tense and include the fact that Noise was their debut, when they were released, stuff like that...
    • Fixed tense, but I don't have the other information. I tried to get it (see ref. #9), but the band doesn't seem to know, either. Best I can tell, the two albums were released concurrently. —Zeagler (talk)
  • Refer to band members only by surnames after you've introduced them.
    • I've removed second occurrences of full names within each major section, but I think it's best to repeat the full name when starting a new section. (If the article were on just one person I'd agree with you.) Is that okay? —Zeagler (talk)
  • Ref 26 seems broken
  • Is the myspace blog in the references section actually cited anywhere?