Talk:Edward Wells (RNZAF officer)
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
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editI reckon this is over dabbed. There aren't that many Edwards Wells, so Edwards Wells (pilot) should suffice. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:54, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
- Peacemaker67, thanks for the advice, I have moved as suggested. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 02:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
- No worries mate. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:21, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:39, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
- The second paragraph of the lead contains five sentences all starting with "He". Can this be varied a bit?
- Have revised, how does it read now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- "The Second World War was well underway at the time of Wells' completion of flying training and, now a pilot officer," - Link pilot officer
- Done. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- "The next month Wells was promoted to flying officer" - Link flying officer
- Actually linked in the previous paragraph, when another RAF pilot is mentioned. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- What was the cause of death?
- None of my sources say. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- The later life section has three sentences starting with "He" and a fourth with "His". Can this be varied?
- Have revised, how is it now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- Is there a specific reason why RAF Bawdsey is not included in the list of his commands in the infobox
- Have added. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- Considering consolidating the later life and postwar career sections, these are both rather short sections.
- I understand where you are coming from as they are both short sections but I prefer to keep them that way since they are quite logically fall into military life and civilian life. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
- External link is about Alan Deere, doesn't look relevant
- That's embarrassing - I cut and pasted from the Alan Deere article so as to keep the language of the description consistent. I changed the name but forgot to update the link! Fixed now. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
Looks good beyond those little points, placing on hold. Hog Farm Bacon 20:31, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking the time to review this article. I have responded to your points above, I hope they are satisfactory. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)