Talk:Edward Wells (RNZAF officer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:39, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

• The second paragraph of the lead contains five sentences all starting with "He". Can this be varied a bit?

• Have revised, how does it read now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• "The Second World War was well underway at the time of Wells' completion of flying training and, now a pilot officer," - Link pilot officer

• Done. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• "The next month Wells was promoted to flying officer" - Link flying officer

• Actually linked in the previous paragraph, when another RAF pilot is mentioned. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• What was the cause of death?

• None of my sources say. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• The later life section has three sentences starting with "He" and a fourth with "His". Can this be varied?

• Have revised, how is it now? Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• Is there a specific reason why RAF Bawdsey is not included in the list of his commands in the infobox

• Have added. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• Considering consolidating the later life and postwar career sections, these are both rather short sections.

• I understand where you are coming from as they are both short sections but I prefer to keep them that way since they are quite logically fall into military life and civilian life. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

• External link is about Alan Deere, doesn't look relevant

• That's embarrassing - I cut and pasted from the Alan Deere article so as to keep the language of the description consistent. I changed the name but forgot to update the link! Fixed now. Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

Looks good beyond those little points, placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 20:31, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for taking the time to review this article. I have responded to your points above, I hope they are satisfactory. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:03, 3 November 2020 (UTC)