Talk:Empedocles (The X-Files)/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by 24.156.65.45 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 14:40, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
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editMinor edits i made:
- Plot
- "Jeb he sees a car chase" >> "Jeb witnesses a car chase"
- "the murders is related to" >> "the murders are related to"
- "through the head" >> "in the head"
- "when they discovered Luke’s body, Reyes and Doggett both saw the body transform into ashes momentarily." >> "both Reyes and Doggett saw it transform into ashes instantly."
- "convincing himself he did not see it" >> "convincing himself he did not saw it"
- "Doggett soon attacks Mulder for looking into his son's case, but Reyes soon shows up" Redundancy of "soon". >> "Doggett soon attacks Mulder for looking into his son's case, but then Reyes shows up"
- Other minor fixes. They're too many to note here.
—Hahc21 04:20, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
- Luke's murder was solved in "Release"---- Knowing there could be trouble if Luke ever told anyone about Regali's "business", Regali killed Luke. 24.156.65.45 (talk) 22:15, 23 May 2023 (UTC)
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