Talk:Flaws and All/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 17:53, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Infobox

Is missing some detailed information (release date, is there an image?, and it should not just read "song")

• It was not released as a single. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Lead

Why isn't the album "B'Day Deluxe Edition" linked?

• Done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"while Beyoncé Knowles and Taylor produced the R&B record" - what record?

• Err, the song Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"received positive attention from critics" - why is attention here? Maybe something like this "received (mixed to) positive reviews from critics".

• Don't get it but done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Background

"Beyoncé Knowles and Taylor also produced the R&B song" needs rewording, what about It was also produced by Knowles and Taylor

• Don't get it but done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"the song was additionally included on compilation albums" which ones? and source?

• Read on... Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"compilation album" - delink, don't need two of them linked in the same section.

• Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"In 2008, Knowles released the song on a compilation album dedicated to karaoke performances titled Beyoncé Karaoke Hits, Vol. I." is this even necessary? I never had seen this being stated on any song article.

• Of course it's not necessary, but I don't see why it not be included. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Reception

""Flaws and All" garnered positive reviews from critics, most of which complimented the ballad for being original and favored its addition to the B'Day re-release" - source?

• Removed. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"BET included the song "Flaws and All" as one of the "Top 10 Feel Good R&B Songs", ranked at number nine" needs re-wording, probably should remove "Flaws and All". You have stated the song multiple times.

• So what? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Music video

"The video for the song was shot on " - remove "for the song"

• Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Live performances

"including the song as part of her set list" - remove "the song" and rewording to something like this Knowles performed the song on multiple occasions, including on her tour The Beyoncé Experience (2007).

• Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

"The performance also caught the attention of The New York Times" delink The New York Times, its already linked in this same section.

• Removed first ocassion as it was irrelevant. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

""Flaws and All" was not included on the tour's live album, I Am... World Tour" - why not? If not notable, then remove sentence.

• Does there need to be a reason? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)

Final notes

I still see that this article needs a lot of work. Please address the concerns that I had stated. I had wrote down these notes as I read the article. I am going to ✗ Fail this nomination. Once you have completed the issues, try giving the article a peer review. This can help for your next try at good article status. Thank you, AJona1992 (talk) 18:15, 9 July 2011 (UTC)