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Did you know... that after being damaged twice by Allied ships, escorting a blockade runner, and hitting two mines, the German torpedo boat T24 was sunk by air-launched rockets?
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"On 3 July T24 and her sister T25 departed for Western France." The following sentence mentions British coastal artillery, so for better context, I think it should be mentioned they were (presumably) going via the English Channel.
Added, but I'd have thought that the mentions of French ports on the Channel visited en route would have informed the reader that they weren't taking the long route past Scotland.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:30, 14 January 2019 (UTC)Reply
"through the Bay."; specify Bay of Biscay here, it is the first time it is mentioned.
See above
"threw spray over their forward guns that made them difficult to operate."; replace that with and
I think "which" works even better
"Korvettenkapitän Franz Kohlauf"; presumably commander of 4th Flotilla. If so, mention this.
"The German ships had been spotted first..."; This starts off quite a long sentence, consider breaking it up.
I've separated the bit covering T24's inaction with a semi-colon
"37 mm anti-aircraft guns"; shouldn't this be 3.7 cm for consistency with the armament of the T24 (I assume; the way this sentence is structured suggests you are referring to the exchange of fire so the 40mm is British).
Referring to the citations, it looks like you use the year of pub to differentiate between the two Whitley refs - but there are some that don't have the year.