Talk:German torpedo boat T24/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 23:50, 4 January 2019 (UTC)

I will review this one, comments to follow in due course. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 23:50, 4 January 2019 (UTC) This looks in good shape. My comments:

• "On 3 July T24 and her sister T25 departed for Western France." The following sentence mentions British coastal artillery, so for better context, I think it should be mentioned they were (presumably) going via the English Channel.
  • It's mentioned in the lede.
    • But the lede is supposed to be a summary of the body of the article, and it is not mentioned in the body. Zawed (talk) 08:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
      • Added, but I'd have thought that the mentions of French ports on the Channel visited en route would have informed the reader that they weren't taking the long route past Scotland.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:30, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
• "through the Bay."; specify Bay of Biscay here, it is the first time it is mentioned.
  • See above
• "threw spray over their forward guns that made them difficult to operate."; replace that with and
  • I think "which" works even better
• "Korvettenkapitän Franz Kohlauf"; presumably commander of 4th Flotilla. If so, mention this.
• "The German ships had been spotted first..."; This starts off quite a long sentence, consider breaking it up.
  • I've separated the bit covering T24's inaction with a semi-colon
• "37 mm anti-aircraft guns"; shouldn't this be 3.7 cm for consistency with the armament of the T24 (I assume; the way this sentence is structured suggests you are referring to the exchange of fire so the 40mm is British).
• Referring to the citations, it looks like you use the year of pub to differentiate between the two Whitley refs - but there are some that don't have the year.
  • Good catch
• No dupe links
• No dab links
• External links check out OK
• Image tags look fine

That's my comments complete. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:55, 9 January 2019 (UTC)

• • Thanks for the thorough review. Let me know if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:08, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
    • @Zawed: just checking you haven't forgot about this. L293D (☎ • ✎) 00:26, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
      • Looking good, I've queried one point though. Zawed (talk) 08:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
        • OK, passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:29, 15 January 2019 (UTC)