Talk:Goldenheart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 14:56, 28 April 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:56, 28 April 2013 (UTC)

Hi Dan, on first pass, this looks like excellent work. I'm sorry this was allowed to sit in the GA queue for so long, when it seems to need so little work before passage. I've made a few tweaks as I went; feel free to revert any with which you disagree. I'll begin the checklist now. -- Khazar2 (talk) 21:42, 28 April 2013 (UTC)

No problem with the wait; these articles aint going nowhere, LOL. I think this line needs punctuation to delineate the citation, and this shouldn't use a present participle. Otherwise, good looks for the review. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 29 April 2013 (UTC)

It's not a big deal either way, but I don't think the MOS calls for extra punctuation to be added to the sentence to set off a footnote. The first example in MOS:PUNCTFOOT is grammatically comparable to the sentence in question and doesn't add the extra comma:

• "Example: Flightless birds have a reduced keel[10] and smaller wing bones than flying birds of similar size.[11][12]".

Either way, thanks again for all your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:32, 29 April 2013 (UTC)

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Spotchecks show no evidence of copyright issues.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass