Talk:Gurbachan Singh Salaria/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Indy beetle (talk · contribs) 01:05, 8 January 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Happy to review this article. The Congo Crisis is my specialty, so I'm familiar with this action that Salaria was involved in. I already added some background info to the article. Here are my comments:

• The subject is deceased, perhaps you could add a fair-use image of him based off of the criteria found here: Template:Non-free biog-pic

• Done. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

• Is it known when Salaria was promoted to Captain?

• There is no specific mention any source. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

• Chakravorty (1995) has some info that is not included in this article but should be:
  • Salaria's men were attacked by 90 gendarmes and two armoured vehicles that had entrenched themselves at the airport's old airstrip
  • Salaria was hit in the neck by automatic gunfire and collapsed due to blood loss
  • Salaria was the only Indian fatality; 12 of his men were wounded

• Some sources say 150 gendarmes, clarified in a foot note. I couldn't find the sentence in the that says Salaria was the only Indian fatality. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

• Most sources say Salaria was leading 16 (a few others say 26) men during the action, this should probably be included

• Most of the sources say "platoon", please mention the sources. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: These sources say he was leading 16 men ([1][2][3][4]) while these say he was leading 26 ([5][6]). -Indy beetle (talk)

@Indy beetle: Clarified via footnote. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 08:41, 13 January 2018 (UTC)

• Prime Minister Narendra Modi mentioned Salaria in a speech about India's contribution to UN peacekeeping [7]. Is this relevant enough for inclusion? The source also notes that the captain was the only UN peacekeeper to ever be awarded the PVC, which should probably be mentioned both in the body of the article and in the lead.

• Done. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

• According to this source [8] Salaria was the first graduate of the National Defence Academy to win a PVC.

• Done. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

• For purposes of NPOV, the term "enemy" should, except in close reference to Salaria's PVC citation, be avoided.

• @Indy beetle: Replaced. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:33, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

-Indy beetle (talk) 01:05, 8 January 2018 (UTC)

@Indy beetle: Thanks for the review, and sharing those sources. I'll address your comments by next week's Wednesday. This week I'm a bit busy with my academics, sorry for the inconvenience. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 03:43, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

Also, if you are able to read this ([9]), it has some extra info that might be of interest. -Indy beetle (talk) 07:32, 10 January 2018 (UTC)

I think this bit "Salaria felt that it was the prudent to attack before the gendarmes reorganised" is similar. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 08:41, 13 January 2018 (UTC)

I meant a quote later in the text. No problem I just added it myself. -Indy beetle (talk) 01:05, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

Assessment

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

-Indy beetle (talk) 01:05, 14 January 2018 (UTC)