Talk:HMS Lyra (1910)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:16, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this one, comments to follow in next few days. Zawed (talk) 22:16, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

Lead

• although sustaining damage: "although sustained damage"

Well spotted. I have amended the sentence to make it clear.

Design and description

• After the coal-burning Beagle class,...: be explicit that the Beagle class precedes the Acorn class (as stated in the lead).

Clarified.

• Unlike previous designs,...: presumably destroyer designs?

Made explicit.

• which gave a range was 1,540: "which gave a range of 1,540"

Corrected.

• Two single QF 12-pounder (3 in (76 mm)) guns: suggest amending the pipelink so that only the 76mm is bracketed, i.e. consistent with how it is presented in the infobox. Ditto for the 3-pounder that is later mentioned but reverse the order of the measurements so that inches is first (for consistency in presentation with the other armaments mentioned).

Good spot. That is now amended.

• Suggest amending the characteristics section of the infobox to mention that they are "as built".

Added

Construction and career

• The laid down/launch dates recited in the first para are inconsistent with the infobox.

Yes, that is strange. I have corrected them.

• the amount of staff needed: suggest replacing staff with personnel. Staff comes across as a term you would use for a business.

Changed.

Other stuff

• Use title case for the Colledge & Warlow ref

Done.

• Newbolt is listed as a source but unless I missed it, is not actually cited.

I have added the relevant section in the body.

• Dupe links: depth charges, Second Destroyer Flotilla

Removed.

• Image tags check out

Thank you.

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 09:47, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

@Zawed: Thank you for your excellent review. I believe I have made the changes needed. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 18:06, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

Passing this as GA as I believe that the article meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 09:33, 12 July 2022 (UTC)