Talk:HMS Raider (1916)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:00, 9 February 2021 (UTC)Reply


  • Was the range 3,440 nmi or 3,450 nmi? One is provided in the infobox and the other in the body
  • Great spot. That was a typo.
  • The laid down date in the infobox is 25 October 1915, while only the less specific October 1915
  • Updated. The infobox date comes from George Robinson and David Waller's excellent website.
  • "After the Grand Fleet was disbanded, the ship was recommissioned with Reduced Complement on 20 November 1919" - Is it standard for "Reduced Complement" to be capitalized
  • I am not sure so I have removed the phrase.
  • "After the Grand Fleet was disbanded, the ship was recommissioned with Reduced Complement on 20 November 1919" - This implies that it was decommissioned at some point, but it isn't directly mentioned
  • Good point. I have added another reference and changed the wording to remove the ambiguity.
  • Image licensing looks fine.
  • "The vessel remained part of the Fifteenth Destroyer Flotilla until the end of the war" - I'd recommend rephrasing this sentence, as the source only really confirms that the ship was still listed as part of the Fifteenth Destroyer Flotilla in July 1918.
  • Good point. Intermediate copies of The Navy List also name Raider in the Flotilla, but it would not be efficient to list them all. I have reworded.
  • Sources are all RS and formatting looks acceptable.

Looks good beyond the above, placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 16:59, 9 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Hog Farm: Thank you for your comments and suggestions. simongraham (talk) 01:21, 10 February 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Simongraham: - I'm having concussion symptoms after a fall and it hurts to look at a screen. I'll give this another read through, it just may be a few days before symptoms clear up enough for me to do that though. Hog Farm Talk 01:36, 10 February 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Hog Farm:I am sorry to hear that. I hope you get well soon. simongraham (talk) 02:04, 10 February 2021 (UTC)Reply