Talk:Haytham Kenway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:47, 19 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Can we fill in the "n.a." fields in the fair use image, "not applicable" isn't a suitable rationale for NFCC.
• " great and really effective idea" is this a quote? It's not really encyclopedic in tone
• "led to some backlash" from?
• "include a reference to Haytham for the game" in rather than for?
• "that certain fans"' or just "some"?
• "Born in .. born into..." repetitive.
• "unbeknownst" would "unknown" do the job?
• "families demise" do you really mean "family's demise"?
• "Templar Shay Patrick Cormac to keep" overlinked.
• Don't link common words like earthquake.
• "As the assassins refused" lower case or capital assassin?
• "After crushing the" tone
• "his father Edward, he" overlinked.
• "son, Connor. In a contemporary review of Assassin's Creed III for " both overlinked.
• "his father Edward, with" overlinked.
• Odd turn of phrase "actually right" so I'd put it in quotes.
• You appear to be not repeating links in refs, so unlink ref 19.
• would expect refs 25, 29 and 35 to have their work in italics.

That's all on a quick read, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:22, 25 May 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man All done, thanks for the input!--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 12:41, 27 May 2021 (UTC)

DasallmächtigeJ, I think it is important to implement {{Cite video game}} in this article, like how I did in this diff. --► Sincerely: Solavirum 01:04, 29 May 2021 (UTC)

That's not a requirement of GAN. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 06:28, 29 May 2021 (UTC)

DasallmächtigeJ those fair use "n.a." should be replaced, "not applicable" doesn't apply to individual parts of NFCC. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:10, 29 May 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man done.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 07:58, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

All good, passing to GA. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:41, 31 May 2021 (UTC)