Talk:Haytham Kenway/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:47, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Can we fill in the "n.a." fields in the fair use image, "not applicable" isn't a suitable rationale for NFCC.
- " great and really effective idea" is this a quote? It's not really encyclopedic in tone
- "led to some backlash" from?
- "include a reference to Haytham for the game" in rather than for?
- "that certain fans"' or just "some"?
- "Born in .. born into..." repetitive.
- "unbeknownst" would "unknown" do the job?
- "families demise" do you really mean "family's demise"?
- "Templar Shay Patrick Cormac to keep" overlinked.
- Don't link common words like earthquake.
- "As the assassins refused" lower case or capital assassin?
- "After crushing the" tone
- "his father Edward, he" overlinked.
- "son, Connor. In a contemporary review of Assassin's Creed III for " both overlinked.
- "his father Edward, with" overlinked.
- Odd turn of phrase "actually right" so I'd put it in quotes.
- You appear to be not repeating links in refs, so unlink ref 19.
- would expect refs 25, 29 and 35 to have their work in italics.
That's all on a quick read, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:22, 25 May 2021 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man All done, thanks for the input!--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 12:41, 27 May 2021 (UTC)
- DasallmächtigeJ, I think it is important to implement {{Cite video game}} in this article, like how I did in this diff. --► Sincerely: Solavirum 01:04, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
- That's not a requirement of GAN. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 06:28, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
- DasallmächtigeJ those fair use "n.a." should be replaced, "not applicable" doesn't apply to individual parts of NFCC. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:10, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
- That's not a requirement of GAN. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 06:28, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
- DasallmächtigeJ, I think it is important to implement {{Cite video game}} in this article, like how I did in this diff. --► Sincerely: Solavirum 01:04, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
All good, passing to GA. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:41, 31 May 2021 (UTC)