Talk:Horseshoe crab/GA1

Latest comment: 2 months ago by Mgp28 in topic GA Review

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Nominator: RenaMoonn (talk · contribs) 18:08, 16 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Mgp28 (talk · contribs) 17:43, 22 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Hello, I am going to review this article against the good article criteria. This is my first review so if I seem to go off the path, please let me know. Mgp28 (talk) 17:43, 22 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Hello, I haven't yet finished the review. In particular, I plan to follow up on more of the references so my comments might change but I'm starting to share some thoughts below. I hope they are helpful. Please let me know if they're not. Mgp28 (talk) 07:59, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Don't worry, your comments are definitely helpful. This is my first good article nomination so I'm in a similar position to you.
Also, am I allowed to change the article to accommodate your recommendations? RenaMoonn (talk) 17:42, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
Yes, from other reviews I've looked at I think that's common. Do you want to let me know when you've made changes and I'll go through the article again? Mgp28 (talk) 17:49, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

I will add further comments below. I will let you know when I have finished adding comments. Mgp28 (talk) 11:36, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

well written?

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The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct

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  1. The sentence This contrasts with the lifestyle of extinct members, as some transitioned to living in freshwater could be clearer, perhaps with something like "Some extinct species of horseshoe crab lived in fresh water". Also mention the living species that lives in brackish water.
  2. Instead of extends all back to the Ordovician, I would suggest "The earliest xiphosuran fossils date back 445 million years to the Ordovician". Then the next sentence, "Modern horseshoe crabs first appear in the fossil record approximately..."
  3. The comment about 88 lineages -- is this 88 species?
  4. Instead of the link to Incertae sedis, which will not be familiar to many readers, the uncertainty about genera should be explained in plain English.
  5. Need more clarity about when breeding season is. Where is it year round? Is it only at full moon everywhere?
  6. For reproduction, is it saying they only breed in the sand or mud in which they themselves hatched? I think this could be clearer.
  7. Don't need "1,000,000" in brackets after "1 million"
  8. Being arthropods... could be, "In common with all arthropods..."
  9. In Sexual size dimorphism, I would describe the difference in size before explaining it. In this section I am left wondering how big is the difference, and don't find out until behavior and life history. I also think parts don't make sense. Point number 1 says that they have similar-size preferences in choosing a mate, but point 5 says there is no evidence of assortative mating. How can both be true?
I understand that these are different hypotheses but I still think it's confusing for readers of this article. Point 1 seems to rely on a fact that there is assortative mating and point 5 seems to rely there being no assortative mating. If these statements are part of the hypothesis then I think it needs to be rephrased. I'll take another look at the source article, although I will admit I didn't find that the easiest to follow when I skimmed through it rather rapidly.
  1. Repetition of genome and redundancy of size in The genomes of C. rotundicauda and T. tridentatus have an unusually large genome size -- either the genomes are unusually large, or the species have unusually large genomes.
I went ahead and made an edit here to clarify the text
  1. Following Femke's helpful comments, I have gone back through and reconsidered how things could be improved for a lay reader. I suggest,
    1. When it says they are "benthic" animals, can we briefly describe what this means?
    2. Could we replace extant with "living", or "still living", or add a parenthetical definition on its first use?
    3. Could sexual size dimorphism be described as "size difference between the sexes"?
    4. extirpated -> "locally extinct"?

It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation

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Lead sections
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  1. There are several points I would suggest adding to the lead:
    1. An idea about how long ago they evolved in their current form, to help explain the "living fossil" statement
    2. A bit more about their habitats, such as the ones that live in brackish water, and something about where they breed
    3. The mention of bait, eating and harvesting blood doesn't seem to match with the article's main text. It starts occasionally used as fishing bait, whereas in the main text it sounds like measures are urgently needed because they are hunted so much. I would start with the main threat -- presumably the medical industry -- then the lesser threats can come after.
    4. A mention of conservation efforts.
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  1. There is information about conservation in multiple sections, some of which repeats itself. Then it seems there is less about it in the actual Conservation status section. I suggest collating it all in one place.
Words to watch
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  1. "Nonetheless" feels like we are headed toward original research. I think the first paragraph of phylogeny could be rephrased -- I will try to come up with something clearer.
  2. The source does not describe they immune system as "incredibly efficient". "Highly efficient" would match the source.
  3. The word enigmatic is used in both of the sources for that sentence, but I still find it odd. Does the word have a technical meaning in this context?
Can we explain its meaning of difficult to place phylogenetically for the lay reader?
Thank you
Writing about fiction
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  1. Not applicable
Embedded lists
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  1. I think the section Evidence from genomic sequencing would be better as text.

verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

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It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline

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  1. Several references appear repeatedly in the list, so I found I kept re-opening the same source. Some of these are for different pages. I would recommend combining all the repeated references and suggest using the {{rp}} template for different page numbers.
Thank you for sorting this

Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose)

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  1. For this section I will use the numbering of the references as they are at present.
    1. Reference 4 doesn't seem to use the phrase "living fossils"
    2. Reference 21 mentions morphological stability but I don't think it supports either the statement few, if any, mutations that would result in more beneficial alleles or This causes horseshoe crabs to have comparatively high rates of gene regulation, something that likely contributes to their morphological status.
    3. A moratorium was restricted to male crabs in Delaware doesn't seem to be supported by the following reference
Thank you for the reference. I have also rephrased the sentence slightly.
  1. I do worry that some parts are straying into original research, especially regarding genetics. Are there reviews or recent book chapters that summarize this information?
  1. Looks good.

Is it broad in its coverage?

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It addresses the main aspects of the topic

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  1. Is horseshoe crab blood used in laboratories globally? Feels US focussed.

It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style)

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  1. Possibly too much detail about licensing of Limulus clotting factor C, but no urgent need to change that

It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each

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  1. Yes.

Is it stable?

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It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute

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  1. A lot of recent edits but mostly from the proposer. No edit wars.

Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

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  1. All look good

Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions

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  1. The image showing the difference between male and female horseshoe crabs needs to describe which is the male and which is the female in the caption.

Mgp28 (talk) 17:40, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Discussion

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Mgp28 requested an experienced eye to give feedback on the review. In general, the review of a high quality :). You are right that reviews include a period of improvements by the nominators in response to comments. This should typically take around 7 days, but can sometimes take longer if necessary. A couple of things I would do differently:

  • When you spot check references, it's good practice to say how many references you've checked. If you check 3 sources, and all three have errors, there may be a systemic problem with the article and it may need to be failed. If you check 30 sources and 3 have errors, that can be fixed during the review.
  • The original research concerns refer to the instances of failed verification you found, right? If not, can you expand on it?
  • I would be stricter on making the article accessible to a wider public. For instance, "establish processes for evaluating alternative pyrogenicity tests and report back [to the Senate] on steps taken to increase their use" is overly technical, and it's unclear how it connects with the previous sentences. Ideally, quotes are used sparingly, mostly for creative outburst, not things that are easily paraphrased.
  • Usually reviews will contain slightly more prose suggestions for an article this size.

Overall, well done :). Let me know if either of you have any specific questions. —Femke 🐦 (talk) 19:31, 23 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for these really helpful comments. I'll go back through my review later and make some additional comments. I think I had more concerns about the phylogeny and evolution section, but will re-review and add more detail above. Mgp28 (talk) 08:10, 24 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
Most of the pointers you gave earlier have been fixed, I just saved the worst part (the phylogeny and evolution section) for last
Here’s a Google doc with my changes (green), things I didn’t want to change (orange), things I haven’t changed (black), and commentary
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QHjgqsouc83czRSr_ZIZ-sPIh-tSR74R9SzvNBZo6wo/edit RenaMoonn (talk) 15:01, 24 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
Totally agree with making the article more accessible. You should’ve seen what I was working with in the original Evolution section. It was FAR worse than it is now. If you wanna see what it looked like, go back to before I started making edits. RenaMoonn (talk) 15:04, 24 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
I feel it's looking a lot better now, thank you. I've struck out the comments that have been addressed and have added some additions above. I've tried not to add too much – some technical words are inevitable and where they are hyperlinks I'm hoping that readers can follow those for further clarity – but I think there are some technical terms that will need to be explained.
Regarding my comment on original research, I think it mostly was in terms of the problems I had already mentioned regarding sources. My broader concern is that it is all based on primary sources. I think the article accurately reflects what those sources say, but if possible I would prefer to have secondary sources that synthesize this material. As a reader, I feel I am implicitly synthesizing it myself to conclude they are not arachnids, but it would be nice if a review or book explained why the analysis that said they are arachnids was incorrect. Mgp28 (talk) 10:37, 25 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
At least from my experience in paleontology research, phylogenies typically aren't synthesized in that way. People will add new taxa to a phylogeny (like the second study did) but there aren't really outside reviews explaining why the new phylogeny is better.
Also the reason why the arachnid-placement phylogeny is wrong is WAY too niche and jargony for this article. Makes me ashamed too as i want to do paleogenomics stuff later in life, but i haven't been trained on how to understand the specifics.
Anyways, I think i got all the article stuff i wanted to change fixed (mainly problems with the lead and phylogeny and evolution section) so you can do the final review now! RenaMoonn (talk) 02:38, 26 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hi RenaMoonn, Thank you for this. It's a shame that some material had to be removed, but better to be shorter than inaccurate. I'll try to get the final review done tomorrow. Mgp28 (talk) 18:26, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
I've made a few edits to the article. I hope that's OK. The instructions said to be bold if the article was nearly there. I've struck out almost all of my comments above as they have been addressed. I think the article has improved a lot over the past week, and I hope you do too.
I realised I never answered Femke's comment about how many sources I had checked up on. I'm afraid I don't know exactly. The first time I went through the article there were duplicate references and I got myself into a bit of a muddle as I had the same sources opening in multiple tabs, but judging by how many of the hyperlinks have changed colour, it looks like I have visited at least 21 sources. I believe this article now meets the criteria and I am going to mark it as a good article! Mgp28 (talk) 16:41, 29 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
PS I had made comments about the use of horseshoe-crab blood in the US vs globally, but looking back I don't think that is actually an accurate criticism. The bit about regulation of the alternative to the blood is perhaps a little US-centric, but it's discussed in terms of conservation of the animals that are harvested in the US, so I am also striking that. Mgp28 (talk) 17:05, 29 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Discussion

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I have enjoyed this process. The comments that I made on my initial reviews (listed above) were addressed and I believe the article meets the good article criteria. I have added the GA header to the talk page, and I have listed the article at Wikipedia:Good articles § Arthropods. Congratulations on the good article!

If anyone has any feedback about the review, please let me know. Mgp28 (talk) 17:05, 29 August 2024 (UTC)Reply