Talk:Hurricane Lorena (2019)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 23:54, 28 March 2021 (UTC)Reply


Infobox

  • The "1-minute sustained" portion appears only in the infobox.
  • 985 mbar (hPa) appears only in the infobox and lead.
  • 29.09 inHg appears only in the infobox.
  • $50+ million figure appears only in the infobox and lead.
    •   Semi-done It is not specified where most of the damage from Lorena came from, so I can't add it to a specific Impact section. Also, the pressure is in fact mentioned in the meteorological history already. Everything else fixed. Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 14:25, 29 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
      • I may just be missing it, but where is the pressure mentioned in "Meteorological history"? Also, why not add a short summary (just a couple sentences or a paragraph) between "Preparations and Impact" and "Mexico" giving a general overview? That would be a natural place to add in the $50+ million figure. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:47, 12 April 2021 (UTC)Reply
        • Sorry, I removed the pressure from the Meteorological history on accident at some point. I re-added it. Also, isn't the lead already a general overview of the impacts? I feel that is unnecessary. Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 00:43, 13 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • Lorena was the thirteenth named storm and seventh and final hurricane of the 2019 Pacific hurricane season. — Appears only in lead.
  • With increasing convection or thunderstorm development — Does the "or" mean that "thunderstorm development" is being equated to convection? Also, the term "convection" appears only in the lead.
  • It's odd that Tropical Storm Mario is mentioned prominently in the lead and main image, but mentioned only in passing in the body of the article.
    •   Comment. Mario is a separate storm and mentioning it too many times would be "off focus". Mario is mentioned once in the Baja California Peninsula impact section mainly because it attributed to even more dangerous surf conditions than Lorena would by itself. Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 14:41, 29 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Anything to link "remnant low" to?

Meteorological history

  • Anything to link "tropical wave" to?
  • "NHC" should have the full name (and a link, if available) the first time it is mentioned
  • By 06:00 UTC September 17, the disturbance quickly improved in overall organization — "quickly" is a bit odd here, since it refers to a span of time, while the first clause suggests that the remainder of the sentence will be about one fixed moment in time.
  • was declared Tropical Storm Lorena — Who declared it so?
 Y Fixed to specify NHC (National Hurricane Center). Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 14:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • This section is one monster of a paragraph, and should be split into two or three.
    •  Y Fixed.
  • What does "Due to emerging" mean?
    •  Y Not sure how I missed that. I have changed it to "Due to having emerged..."
  • What is "a remnant low"?
    •   Comment. Although since this is a "scientific" article, I wouldn't go into much detail about it, but tropical cyclones when they weaken enough will "lose" their tropical cyclone characteristics and generally become pretty deformed and lack any real thunderstorms, and thats usually when we call them a "remnant" as a remnant of a tropical cyclone and now simply just a low pressure system. Thankfully now its linked. Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 14:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Jalisco

  • Tropical storm watches were issued — Who issued them?
    •  Y Fixed to specify that Mexico issued them.
  • During which time Lorena moved very close to the shorelines of the states of Colima and Jalisco during its first peak in strength. — Sentence fragment, and also confusing ("During ... during")
    •  Y Fixed. Hopefully the sentence makes more sense now.
  • What sort of "minor slides"? Mud slides?

Colima

  • Governor of Colima, José Ignacio Peralta, stated that ... Further evaluation — When did Peralta make his statement/when was the further evaluation done?
    •  Y Although the article isn't very specific on when the Governor made his statement, I can assume it happened on September 20 because thats when the article was published and there is no mention of a date. Same applies to the "evaluation". Hurricaneboy23 (page) * (talk) 15:07, 29 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • There was a report — Who reported it?

Baja California Peninsula

Other states

  • Residents of Sonora prepared for torrential rainfall as Lorena approached as a tropical depression. — What day was this?

Arizona

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