Talk:IBM Palm Top PC 110/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:18, 1 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• I think the could be touch longer, two more sentences?
• Why only one claim of the lead referenced? That can probably be referenced in the main body of the article.
• Link lithium-ion.
• "the JIS format" use the expanded version before initialism.
• "PC Card slots" link?
• "parallel and serial" also link?
• "then-aging Intel 486SX with" instead of "then-aging" can we say how long that chip had been around?
• " 4.7 in " convert.
• "dual-scan passive-matrix LCD " link?
• "swing-out modem jack" what?
• "popular ThinkPad 200 subnotebook " link?
• Avoid single-sentence paras.

That's all I have on a first read through. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 16:07, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Hi @The Rambling Man, thanks for your review, I will try to finish it on time. Regarding the JIS format, I have changed the link to a different article, but I think that the abbreviation is the well known name for this type of keyboard, instead of the full name. PhotographyEdits (talk) 15:46, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man  Done, I think that all issues you have pointed out have been addressed. I have changed my mind on the previous comment and added the full name. PhotographyEdits (talk) 15:21, 9 September 2021 (UTC)