Talk:I Think I Love It/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 16:54, 24 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )

3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

Move the video from links to infobox
"is a song recorded by Romanian" → "is a song by Romanian"
"digitally released by" → "digitally released through" as there is currently two many close uses of "by"
"while production was handled" → "while the production was handled"
"track, "I Think I Love It" lyrically discusses" → "track, the song's lyrics discuss"
Remove sentence about praise as it's literally only one critic
"An accompanying music video..." start a new para at this sentence
"directed by Criss Blaziny in Constanța." → "directed by Criss Blaziny." as the location is not notable enough for lead
"Making use of several explicit imagery" this reads awkwardly due to no plural, reword

Done everything apart from the new para suggestion. Paragraphs look really ugly if they're only two or three-line, and that's the case here. I thin it's alright the way it is now.

Background and composition

Add a sentence about the chart performance after the one about release

This doesn't really fit in here. I think for such articles with really short length, it's alright to only mention one single peak in the lead and in its own "Charts" section.

"Alexandra Stan had previously" → "Prior to release, Stan had" as you should only use her full name in the lead and remove WikiLink
""I Think I Love It" served as" → "The song served as"
Target Mixing (audio) to Audio mixing (recorded music)
"as well as "remind us..." → "as well as reminding "us..." since the latter has correct grammar

Done

Music video and promotion

"Stan's YouTube channel" → "Stan's official YouTube channel" as you often refer to them as in articles
"Romania and features the guest appearance of" → "Romania, and features a guest appearance from"
Is the model's country of birth known?

She's probably Romanian, but the source doesn't say it.

"Stan—topless underneath" → "Stan topless underneath"
"cowboy boots—and Olaru" → "cowboy boots, alongside Olaru"
"and to pose in" → "and pose in"
"Stan is seen sporting" → "Stan can be seen sporting"
Target LED to Light-emitting diode
"another large board patterned with bananas and LED border lights in the clip's" → "another large board, patterned with bananas and LED border lights, in the clip's"
"Closing the video are" → "The video closes out with"
"and noted" → "while he also noted"
"Stan also posted" is the word also really needed as it doesn't say that someone else posted first?
""impress[ed] to no end, [...] giving..." → ""impress[ed] to no end", describing her as "giving..."
"the singer sang for" → "the singer sang the song for"
"Stan has further appeared" → "Stan made further appearances"