Talk:In the Name of the Grandfather/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by 120.17.232.220 in topic Celtic FC

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Article looks very good. Only a few minor concerns and suggestions:

  • Markéta Irglová as an Eastern European woman - link to Eastern Europe could be useful
    • Done.
  • the first episode written by Matt Marshall. He had previously worked on the show - combine sentences as "Matt Marshall, who had..."
    • Done.
  • a lot of the writers on 'The Simpsons' who have Irish ancestry - drop quotation marks in 'The Simpsons' for italics, as it doesn't alter the quote
    • Done.
  • Rio de Janeiro's tourist board–who claimed that the city was portrayed as having rampant street crime, kidnappings, slums, and monkey and rat infestations–went so far - either use emdashes or space out the endashes per WP:DASH
    • Done.
  • Inconsistency between curly and non-curly apostrophes, i.e. ’ and ' , so pick one and change the rest
    • Done.
  • In the final episode - clearer to say "final cut/version of the episode"
    • Done.
  • Other Irish references include Grampa dancing in Riverdance style,[22] Homer mentions Angela’s Ashes,[23] musicians Glen Hansard and Markéta Irglová reprise their roles from the 2007 Irish film Once and a billboard advertises a U2 moving company with the slogan "We Move in Mysterious Ways".[23] - in order for this to make sense as a whole sentence opening with "other references include..." all of the verbs should end with -ing, as is done for "Grampa dancing". But grammatically, that should then be "Grampa's dancing", so after all the verbs are changed to -ing, each respective noun should be changed to possessive, unless you can word it alternatively. See User:Tony1/Advanced editing exercises#A common problem—noun plus -ing for a better explanation and some exercises.
    • I took a crack at splitting it up. Is it better?
  • It aired at 7:30 PM on Sky1 - "it" isn't the best way to open a paragraph, especially considering the episode wasn't the last noun to be used
    • Fixed.
  • They offered odds on things - the bookmaker is singular not plural hence "they" should be "it"
    • Fixed.
  • File:In the Name of the Grandfather.jpg isn't of low resolution, so doesn't really qualify as fair use - just scale it down a bit
    • I tagged it with fairusereduce.

Nice work with the article. You have seven days to make the necessary changes, so good luck :) —97198 (talk) 01:38, 26 April 2009 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review. -- Scorpion0422 02:45, 26 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
The changes all look good. I'll resize the image myself quickly before I pass the article. —97198 (talk) 08:12, 26 April 2009 (UTC)Reply

Derry Air

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I added in a note about the Derry Air, or Londonderry Air which was its original name. The name of the airline was a pun on the tune of Danny Boy, but it probably went way over the heads of most people. I suspect most people saw it only as a pun on derrière. Michael of Lucan (talk) 10:21, 16 June 2009 (UTC)Reply

I see I started an edit war. To any Irish person, the reference to the Derry Air is patently obvious. The reference to Derry, the city, is a side issue. I'm going to stay out of the quarrel. Michael of Lucan (talk) 16:39, 16 June 2009 (UTC)Reply

Celtic FC

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Should be noted that in the pub there is clearly the crest of Celtic on the wall and also theres a person in the bar wearing a Celtic FC shirt. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 120.17.232.220 (talk) 23:36, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Reply