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Passed. ZKang123 (talk) 01:09, 16 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 14:51, 26 April 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 07:03, 8 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Will pick up this review in due time.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:03, 8 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Sourcing and spot checks

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  • Earwig highlights some phrases which are place names and so on. Though there's one of main concern:
    • Source says: "the house was completed in 1903. Isaac Rice called it Villa Julia, after his wife." which is too similar to: "When the house was completed in 1903, Rice called it "Villa Julia" after his wife."

Spot checks were done during the copyedits.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:30, 15 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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Copy changes

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  • is a mansion at 346 West 89th Street and Riverside Drive on the Upper West Side of Manhattan in New York City. – This part is a bit wordy. I suggest is a mansion on the Upper West Side of Manhattan in New York City. then move the part about its exact location somewhere else, like in another sentence.
  • yeshiva, or Jewish school, – I think it's not needed to explain what a yeshiva is here given you wikilinked it
  • The facade is made of brick and marble and is four stories high, with an attic and basement – The brick and marble facade is four stories high with an attic and basement.
  • was intentionally designed – remove "intentionally"
  • Although various subsequent tenants – remove "various"
  • hired Herts and Tallant to design a house there – hired Herts and Tallant as the house's architects
  • The Rice family decided to move to the Ansonia Hotel in 1907 and sold it to the tobacconist Solomon Schinasi, whose family modified the house in 1908, 1912, and 1927. – When the Rice family moved to the Ansonia Hotel in 1907, they sold it to the tobacconist Solomon Schinasi...
  • There has been architectural commentary of the house over the years. – positive or negative?

More to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 04:48, 9 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking up the review. I've addressed all of the above so far. – Epicgenius (talk) 22:59, 9 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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  • The Isaac L. Rice Mansion is at 346 West 89th Street, at the southeast corner with Riverside Drive, on the Upper West Side of Manhattan in New York City. – ...at the southeast corner of Riverside Driver
    • I also note Ref 4 supports on the address, but not exactly on the general location in NYC. I guess Ref 3 mentions the general location?
      • Ref 3 does mention that it's on the Upper West Side, and many other sources refer to the building's neighborhood, but only in passing. I've changed it to "the southeast corner of Riverside Drive and 89th Street". Epicgenius (talk) 14:09, 15 July 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • the rest of the grounds were originally composed of terraced gardens. – something about this clause is a bit odd. I understand the terraced gardens used to surround the mansion?
  • designed by Herts & Tallant, who had also designed the rest of the mansion. – designed by Herts & Tallant, who was the overall architect of the mansion.
  • The wall was described as a solid masonry structure – Remove "described as". I don't think this is really controversial information unless it has been contradicted by other sources.
  • is designed in a similar style to the monument's balustrades. – is designed similarly...
  • For ref 10, the LPC 1980 report supports the statement of the style of the parameter wall, but not the other source exactly.
  • Optional: For refs 6, 9, 11, 41 they link to newspapers.com. Might add the via parameter and check for other similar instances, but this is an issue more at FAC stage than here.
  • The Rice Mansion is also near the Normandy apartment building, which is two blocks to the south. – I'm unsure of the relevance of this sentence unless the other apartment is another prominent landmark.
  • Ref 2 supports on freestanding.
  • could not be more than four stories high. – could not be taller than four stories.

Architecture

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  • Swap [18][3]
  • designed in a mixture of the – designed in a mix of...
  • described the house as being patterned... – I might just say the house has been compared (by local news sources of the early-20th-century) to an Italian villa or Swiss chalet.
  • All of these additions were designed in a similar style to Herts & Tallant's original mansion. – Might say All of these additions were designed to match the original architectural style of the mansion.
    • I suppose The aesthetic and structural/integrity of the original exterior is not affected by these later additions of 1927. supports the above statement.
  • The facade is made of brick and marble and is four stories high, with an attic and basement. – The brick and marble facade is four stories tall. Also I'm not sure of adding about the attic and basement because does the facade cover underground?
  • The use of brick in the facade is common... of the time – was common
  • A source from the house's construction described the stairway as measuring 40 feet (12 m) wide. – Would just merge with the previous statement , measuring 40 feet (12 m) wide.
  • The original plans called for twenty granite steps, with a stone balustrade and electric lamps on either side,[27] but the staircase as built has ten steps. – While the original plans called for twenty granite steps, the present staircase only has ten steps. Also does the stone balustrade and lamps still exist
  • depicting six children, who might represent the Rices' sons and daughters. – I note ref 24 is also a bit uncertain about what they exactly depict.
  • with Spanish tile – with Spanish tiles
  • The southern arch is topped by a keystone, and there are three windows above the arch. – ...topped by a keystone, with three windows above the arch
  • Isaac Rice and his wife Julia Barnett Rice had wanted the house to be soundproof because their six children (Muriel, Dorothy, Isaac Leopold Jr., Marion, Marjorie, and Julian) made much noise. – This sentence here is rather chunky. Especially "made much noise" don't seem rather encyclopedic here.
  • also remain in place – remove "in place"
  • and a second elevator – second mention of "elevator" isn't necessary
  • The main hall measures 35 by 35 feet (11 by 11 m). – So basically a square with length of 35 ft?
  • In the basement, there was a chess room where Isaac Rice often arranged matches with overseas competitors. – In the basement was a chess room where Issac Rice played with overseas competitors. Or reworded something similar.
  • decorated their respective room with machinery – respective rooms

History

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That's all for me. Putting on hold.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:28, 15 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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