Talk:Jack of All Parades/GA1
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 16:41, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll post a review for this in the next day or two. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 16:41, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
BennyOnTheLoose, the article mostly looks good. The one issue that stands out is WP:OVERQUOTING, which happens enough that there wasn't enough encyclopedic text under "themes and reception" for me to fully evaluate criterion one. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 23:43, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
- Many thanks, Thebiguglyalien. I've attempted to address all of your comments. Let me know about anything else that is needed. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:44, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- BennyOnTheLoose I looked over the revised themes and reception section. The article is just about good to go except for a few points where the wording is unclear or reads awkwardly:
as openly about Costello's love for O'Riordan
and that the narrator was clearly genuine about this
songs that were more affecting than Costello's other output
- Thebiguglyalien (talk) 15:40, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks, Thebiguglyalien - I've had another attempt at those. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:31, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- BennyOnTheLoose I looked over the revised themes and reception section. The article is just about good to go except for a few points where the wording is unclear or reads awkwardly:
Well-written
I was unable to closely review "Themes and reception" because there's little original prose, mentioned below in criterion two.
- Avoid one-line paragraphs per MOS:PARA.
- Clarify in the body where he was credited as MacManus and where he was credited as The Little Hands.
- I've amended the article per the two points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
and one of only three "three songs of relational celebration"
– three three
The song contains an obscure reference
– Obscure according to whom?
- I've removed that word, and slightly reworked that part. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:42, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
"Crimes of Paris" was a song on Costello's next studio album, Blood & Chocolate (1985)
– Wasn't Blood & Chocolate the previous album?
- The year has been corrected to 1986. (King of America was released in February 1986, and Blood & Chocolate came out in September 1986). BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:42, 25 August 2023 (UTC)
- The image is a little too long, and it can bleed into the references section on some displays.
- I added a "clear" template. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
- Verifiable with no original research
All sources appear reliable. The article suffers from WP:OVERQUOTING, which is a common problem in music articles. Given how short this article is, the quotes make nearly half of it a copy-paste construction. It's generally better to paraphrase rather than quote unless there's a good reason not to.
- Fair comment! I'll work on this. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:42, 25 August 2023 (UTC)
- I've trimmed quotes (and tried to avoid simply rephrasing them). BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:42, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
Spot checks:
- Brackett (2000) – Good.
- Griffiths (2008) – Good.
- Hinton (1999) – Good.
- Gouldstone (1989) – Good.
Broad in its coverage
Covers all of the main aspects. It's on the shorter side, but about what can be expected for a non-single song.
- Neutral
No ideas are given undue weight.
- Stable
No recent disputes, no major updates are expected.
- Illustrated
The one image is Creative Commons and the caption explains its relevance. I took the liberty of sizing down the image to limit any stretching into the next section.
- Ive added another which I think is relevant, but happy to remove it if you disagree. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 30 August 2023 (UTC)