Talk:Kaksparsh/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dwaipayanc (talk · contribs) 03:30, 22 September 2014 (UTC)

Very interesting plot. Liked it. Will review gradually.

• " Hari, then, mumbles something while offering food which leads to the desired." Did not understand this sentence. "which leads to the desired"? what desired?
• "...Hari opposes and does not allow any practised rituals to be performed for her as a widow, which were performed for his widowed aunt, Namu Aatya " You mean those rituals were done to the widowed aunt in the past, right? In any case, seems this bit of info on the widowed aunt is not needed.
• Overall, the plot looks quite big. Can it be trimmed down?
• "Manjrekar had seen 2011 National Award winning film Shala and was..." The name of the film needs to be in italics.
• " The film also had a few scenes in and surrounding the temple, so the next schedule was shifted to Krishna Ghat, Wai, Maharashtra as most of the temples in Konkan region have been restored from their damages over the period of time" Could not understand the point here. What is the effect of most temples in Konkan being restored on the shifting of shooting location?--Dwaipayan (talk) 03:30, 22 September 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks for taking up the review Dwaipayan. I was/am busy in the real life so was not acting for a while. Please give me some time. I will resolve the respective concerns. - Vivvt (Talk) 17:01, 29 September 2014 (UTC)

I have resolved the above mentioned concerns. Please let me know if anything else needs to be fixed. - Vivvt (Talk) 04:59, 1 October 2014 (UTC)

• There are several dead external links, detected by the external link tool linked in this review page. Please fix those. --Dwaipayan (talk) 15:49, 1 October 2014 (UTC)

• I have added some archived URLs plus replaced some URLs with the new ones. Please check and let me know if you find any issues. - Vivvt (Talk) 08:01, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

• "Frustrated and unknowing of what loss she had throughout her life, Uma opens her heart but situation raises more questions." Not clear about the meaning. Situation raises more questions? Vague.

I have tried clarifying but if its not enough I would prefer removing the sentence as there is too much to explain about the overall scene in the plot.

• "Uma decides to go on a fast and relents to none of the family member's request to quit" I am not sure but readers not acquainted with the religious concept of fasting may have trouble understanding this. May be some clarification or wikilinking needed.

Wikilink added

• "When he learned that Uma has started loving him, he stopped talking to her, in spite of his love towards her." When did Hari learn that Uma loves him? That is not mentioned in the plot.Earlier in the plot, it is mentioned that "Disgusted by Uma's behaviour, Hari stops talking to her."

Changed and clarified.

• "he took a vow that he would not let any other man touch Uma." Is it literally touch? Or, did he vow that he would not let Uma be married/sexually active etc?

Yeah...Literally touch.

• "Rahul Ranade used Vibhavari Joshi's voice for all of his compositions except "Janma Baicha", which were rendered by her without any musical accompaniment" So, Joshi did sing Janma Baicha, right? The sentence is self-contradictory.

Corrected.

• "For two situation songs, he requested Kishor Kadam to write the lyrics" Who is he?

Clarified.

• I think there is too much information on the remake.--Dwaipayan (talk) 23:35, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

Till the new page about the remake is fully developed, I would keep the information here. For now, its a redirect to the current page. Once its suitable, I would move it to the appropriate article. - Vivvt (Talk) 09:17, 5 October 2014 (UTC)

• In my opinion, the article meets GA criteria.--Dwaipayan (talk) 20:07, 16 October 2014 (UTC)

• Thank you very much. I appreciate your time and efforts. - Vivvt (Talk) 16:36, 17 October 2014 (UTC)