Talk:Kang Daniel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Flurrious (talk · contribs) 01:56, 4 June 2022 (UTC)

This article passes the Good article criteria.

   Well written: It is well structured and clearly written.
   Verifiable with no original research: Thoroughly cited inline.
   Broad in its coverage: Yes, covers career, influence, and other ventures well.
   Neutral: Handles contract suspension well.
   Stable: Seems fine.
   Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: Has good photos, along with discography and filmography links.

Suggestion for improvement: Impact and influence paragraphs are long and breaking them up could increase readability.

Hi, thank you for reviewing the article. I've just applied this suggestion! HrToss (talk) 09:30, 4 June 2022 (UTC)

Thank you. Other reviewers suggested I be more thorough, so I hope the following helps. Flurrious (talk) 02:04, 14 June 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Article is ranked B class. It's a good length at 4,502 words, with a nice infobox. Images have had their licenses reviewed. Spot checked some of the 211 references. Overall, I think it is substantive and well written.

Suggestions for improvement:

2019: Solo debut with Color on Me

2nd paragraph - The second paragraph lists a number of fan events, consider summarizing them. WP:PROSELINE

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:50, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

2020–2021: Cyan, Magenta, Yellow, and MC ventures

Organizing the last paragraph by date is a little choppy, could summarize about Kang's experience as an MC.

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:51, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

2022: Acting debut and The Story

Kang revealed that he was convinced to give this proposal a try for the comfortable atmosphere created by being around people his age. Could be a little more clear and concise without the passive voice.

Could break this into two paragraphs. The Story part could favor summary over dates.

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:51, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Impact and influence

The sentence with The Barberettes could be a little clearer, may not need the revealed they were fans part. Consider summarizing the The Naver TV's Most Popular Videos lists.

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:51, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Endorsements

Consider summarizing some of the modeling examples in the In September 2017 paragraph.

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:52, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Fashion and modelling

Wasn't immediately clear to me what a rare high in sales was - might mention selling out the reprint.

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:52, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Copyright violations:

Earwig's Copyvio Detector Tool found a few identical phrases, please paraphrase. https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/

one of the most sought-after stars among coveted luxury

selected as an honorary ambassador for the special

his first collaboration with American artists

actor, as well as the streaming ... production debut in South Korea

Career Break Due to Health Issues

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:52, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Neutral point of view

Could improve neutrality a little in these phrases:

Furthering his success as a solo artist

celebrate the sneaker line

enjoyed exclusive content

Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 1:52, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Status query

Flurrious, HrToss, where does this review stand? HrToss's most recent edit to the article was at the end of last month, and the last edit to this page was the middle of June. Can this nomination get moving again? Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:26, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

I think if the copyright and proseline concerns were fixed, would be in good shape. Flurrious (talk) 20:57, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

@Flurrious and HrToss: Any updates on the remaining issues? This should probably move towards closure. CMD (talk) 01:29, 22 October 2022 (UTC)

I still see copyright and proseline issues. Flurrious (talk) 17:43, 22 October 2022 (UTC)

Thanks Btspurplegalaxy for your fixes.Flurrious (talk) 00:14, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

You're welcome. Do you see where there can be any more improvements? Btspurplegalaxy 💬 🖊️ 00:34, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

My main suggestion would be to think how much detail is necessary. The best articles have this attribute:

It stays focused on the main topic without going into unnecessary detail and uses summary style. Flurrious (talk) 22:19, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll take that into consideration. Can I conclude that the review is completed and ready to be promoted? Btspurplegalaxy 💬 🖊️ 01:16, 6 November 2022 (UTC)