Talk:Kill the Lights (Britney Spears song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk • message • contribs • count • logs • email) 09:48, 2 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Link LR Done
confirmed development of the album -> GR (What is this? - Sauloviegas (talk) 09:47, 2 September 2011 (UTC))Reply
- Grammar. Re-write.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:36, 3 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
That long sentence should be separated and proper punctuation should be placed Done
He said he was inspired by Hans Zimmer's scores, such as Pirates of the Caribbean soundtracks -> He credited "" as a primary source of inspiration
On November 13, 2008, the song leaked a month before the album's official release -> Th song leaked on November 13, 2008, a full month before the album's official release
on the forth season
How was it featured? (Played, intro song. etc.?)
along with "Circus"' Junior Vasquez Club Circus Remix. -> rmv double quote. Also, better "the Junior Vasquez Club Circus Remix of "Circus".

The sample needs a much more in depth descriptive rational (with sources)
that talks about -> again
was considered as a sequel of it, -> was considered its sequel
the fact that Spears is introduced by Danja as "Our very own Pop princess / Now Queen of Pop" -> Why?
claiming the singer's vocals are heavily processed in the song -> while describing her vocals as heavily produced

"Kill the Lights" received positive reviews from music critics -> NPOV. There are negative reviews as well
Too many "ands" being used as connectors
Too many "saids"
me","
Link TS
Link Madonna
MoS issues. When in quotes, the album should appear 'Blackout'
This section needs a lot of tightening
On the dated
while its host album Circus -> parent
sixty-nine on Pop 100,
seventy-two on Pop 100 Airplay

No need to write "Britney.com". -> Official website is enough
The winner of the contest would get to see their story becoming a plot for an official music video of a song -> needs significant re-writing
for "Kill the Lights" title "Known Everywhere", that was revealed on February 11, 2009, -> Read this out loud. You are missing some things
are in the back taking -> background?
Right after, wee see an animated Spears -> poor writing; also, your hand appeared to have gone numb while pressing the E key :P
he last three lines really need more professional writing

The source should be introduced. Look at The Emancipation of Mimi to understand

Several are missing accessdates
1. 1 should appear in italics and as People, not People.com. Also, you are missing a publisher
Same for 2
What's with 3?
What makes 5 reliable?
6 should appear in a more detailed format
Why does Britney.com appear in both italics and not?
10; publisher?
11 needs work
Several newspapers require you to use the "cite news" template; #s 22, 23
Similar issues persist. Why is Allmusic is italics?
- Article is now placed on hold. Any questions and/or concerns will be replied to here. Good luck.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:36, 3 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
  - I think I have fixed everything. Take a look and tell me if there is something still. :) - Sauloviegas (talk) 17:21, 3 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

It's kind of weird reading it saying that there are "mixed" reviews, when only one review here is actually negative, if it must be qualified, it should say "mostly positive reviews", so I'm going to change it to that. --WikiDonn (talk) 06:13, 1 October 2011 (UTC)Reply