Talk:King for a Day... Fool for a Lifetime/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Crisco 1492 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 09:46, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

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Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. See below
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Fine
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. Fine
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Fine
  2c. it contains no original research. Fine
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Fine
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Fine
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Fine
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Nothing but constructive edits
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Good
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Good, I think
  7. Overall assessment. Pending

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  • Should definitely have the nationality, genre too probably. Compare with FAs Kala (album) and Is This It
    I went with "San Francisco-based" rather than "American", it seems more relevant to their leanings than something as broad as a country ("American" music is pretty wide spectrum depending on your home city/state, it seems). I took the genre out as a lot of FNM articles are the subject of an endless edit war over precise genres; I felt it best to just let the discussion of the actual music take precedence without listing a genre that will no doubt be changed thirty times back and forth by IP editors. :( GRAPPLE X 14:10, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Production
  • Martin had already begun skipping practice sessions with the band," in 1993?
    1992ish; I've directly mentioned that it was during the recording of Angel Dust. GRAPPLE X 14:10, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "during the Angel Dust recording session" - Huh, when? Link (if available)
    Linked at first reference, didn't realise I hadn't done so. Reworded the date for it to draw more attention to the release year. GRAPPLE X 14:10, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • whose wife Courtney Love was a close friend of Bottum's. - In the lede you have him as Cobain's friend
    Have amended the lead to match this. GRAPPLE X 14:10, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • No information where the album was recorded and the like?
  • All in all the production section is a little light.
    Have expanded it with an extra parapgraph worth of stuff and broken it into two subheadings; if it still feels a bit brief I can see what else I could dig up. GRAPPLE X 17:14, 5 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

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