Talk:Léon Degrelle/GA1

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Reviewer: Kusma (talk · contribs) 13:22, 8 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

I hope to review this one over the weekend. —Kusma (talk) 13:22, 8 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

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At first glance a well-referenced and very nice article about a not so nice person.

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I will make detailed comments on every section here, looking at the lead last (in case any changes in the body necessitate changes in the lead).

  • Early life section: sources/citation for second paragraph?
  • Journalistic career: Several years after his failure when? The following makes it look like it was before 1927, which is not several years after 1925.
  • Degrelle had become interested in the perceived oppression of Mexican Catholics which led to the Cristero War which broke out in 1926. Tense? ...which had led to the 1926 outbreak of the Cristero War?
  • Link for doctorat de troisième cycle doesn't explain what this meant in Belgium in the 1920s.
  • Political activism: into the a political party termed Rex or the Rexist Party apart from the extra word, better to link Rexist Party instead of what you do right now.
  • The section could maybe have a {{main|Rexist Party}}?
  • It would help to be told that the 1936 Belgian election was on 24 May, which explains why things on 3 May are hasty.
  • In Belgium, Degrelle formed alliances with francophone groups, then met Italian fascists and received subsidies from them are these connected?
  • the Nazi Party which had recently come to power in Germany that seems incorrect, the Nazis came to power in 1933.
  • In October, Degrelle returned to Belgium from where? As far as we know, he was in Belgium for the entire paragraph.
  • assistance of Otto Abetz was Abetz assisting Daye in his search or Degrelle in his life in Carcassonne? If you split the sentence you can probably clarify it. What was Abetz ambassador of at the time? You mention later that he became ambassador to France.
    • I've split the sentence, as advised and changed "ambassador" to "diplomat" (that was a goofy mistake; I should have noticed that Colignon nor Conway say he was an "ambassador" until he was made the Nazi ambassador in Paris). –♠Vami_IV†♠ 21:39, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Political agitation: I find the linking of "had been placed" odd, would suggest to either include "Belgium" in that link or to drop the general military administration link.
  • and convince him "and to convince him", "and tried to convince him" would be clearer.
  • They agreed, though only so as to not alienate Abetz, and signed an agreement this is a bit confusing. What did they agree on before signing the agreement? Did they really agree or just pretend to agree?
  • president of the Belgian Socialist Party The Belgian Socialist Party was founded in 1945
  • Neither Degrelle nor those he met with at this time could come to an agreement shouldn't they come to an agreement with each other?
  • Embrace of collaborationism: By the end of 1940 is last sentence of previous paragraph and first sentence of this one.
  • Undeterred Is this the best word?
  • began subsidizing, appointed members to civil office, and allowed it to freely organize. does this lack a Rex?
  • seek Belgians enlistment "seek Belgians enlisting" or perhaps "seek Belgian enlistment"?
  • The moderates attacked Rex for being weak? That sounded odd. The only explanation I can think of is that this was because they were francophones and couldn't accept cooperation with the Flemish?
  • Likely because it had been ordered to by Berlin?
  • (General comment: there is quite a bit of passive voice with unknown actors.)
  • Walloons were considered an inferior people to the Flemish who did this considering? Possibly better "The Nazis considered Walloons to be inferior to the Flemish" or "Hitler considered" or "Abetz considered" or ...
  • Over the rest of 1942, the Legion was reduced to 150 men, and Degrelle was rapidly promoted Did the others die? Leave? The sentence almost implies that the reduction in numbers caused Degrelle's promotion, is that intended? It is perhaps better to split the sentence, as the promotion is more connected to what comes after.
  • Tense in the last sentence of Waffen-SS is off. Should be had risen/had been/had been or "During the war, ... rose/was/was".
  • Exile in Spain: Was it really the Belgian government who sentenced him to death? And what crime was he found guilty of? (Some context about how collaborators were treated in Belgium after the liberation would probably help the unaware reader here).
    Capital punishment in Belgium tells of more than two hundred collaborators who were executed after 1944, but I have never read anything systematic about the Belgian revenge on collaborators. (I know a little, but only from a comics adaptation of Hergé's biography). —Kusma (talk) 22:14, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Legacy: the only leading Nazi or collaborator to escape to safety well, that needs some qualification. Until 1960, this honour probably belonged to Adolf Eichmann (but he didn't live openly). Klaus Barbie is also a contender, or Josef Mengele. Unrepentant free Nazis included various Wehrmacht officers like Otto Ernst Remer. Would you consider Wernher von Braun as a leading Nazi? This section could also do with slightly more precise timings than "after the war".
    •   Removed the highlighted text; I was just reproducing what my sources said. As for precise datings, Conway 1993 is generally allergic to them, especially in the pages cited there (at the very end of the book). Rodríguez 1996 also bemoans a general lack of scholarly interest in Degrelle's post-war years. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 21:21, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Publications: While we're here, I'd like to ask whether you have considered talking about Degrelle's book fr:Tintin mon copain and Degrelle's connections to Hergé (seems like Degrelle actually was the first person to send Hergé any American comics, and even claims to have been the inspiration for Tintin). The French article fr:Léon Degrelle does talk about this quite a bit, and our Hergé article mentions this as well.
    • I didn't want to reproduce a list of Degrelle's work so as to avoid promoting fascism. As the section says, he has a long shadow in the far-right. As for Herge and Tintin, none of the sources I could access spoke of Degrelle's claims about inspiring Tintin. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 21:21, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
    I don't know enough about his works to have a strong opinion on whether they should be listed here. I would suggest to explore the connection to Hergé, though (they certainly both worked in the same ultra-conservative Catholic publishing house, and knew each other). Perhaps we could ask Hergé expert User:Midnightblueowl for some help here? —Kusma (talk) 21:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
    • Links between Hergé and Degrelle are certainly mentioned in biographies of the latter. Perhaps a sentence on Degrelle's relationship with Hergé might be warranted here; although perhaps not more than that. Not a prerequisite for this article becoming a GA, I'd have thought, but something to consider adding. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:20, 12 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
      It is not a prerequisite, but I think it is worth adding (should this go to FA at some point in the future, I would expect it). —Kusma (talk) 10:37, 12 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
      I as well; but again, I think the only source I have access to that mentions the connection is Colignon, and briefly. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 11:24, 12 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • In August, Jewish community leaders Max Mazín and Alberto Benasuly introduced the Catalan lawyer Jorge Trías Sagnier to Violeta Friedman, a Romanian-born survivor of Auschwitz and Considering the case, Trías realized which case? There's some context and introduction missing. Why do we need these Jewish community leaders? Did Violeta Friedman sue Degrelle?
  • Further reading: why do you recommend we read this book and why didn't you use it as a source?

I'll leave you with these comments for now and will come back for the lead and perhaps a second pass through. Overall a nice and well-researched article, I've learned quite a bit... —Kusma (talk) 21:12, 9 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

I think that's all I have. —Kusma (talk) 21:45, 14 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Kusma: How are we looking? –♠Vami_IV†♠ 16:52, 18 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
@Vami IV, one prose issue (Himmler and the 100 Belgian civilians) remains, and the images aren't cleared up yet (one nominated for deletion, and the Rexist flag wasn't correctly tagged last time I checked). Other than that we're done I think. —Kusma (talk) 17:01, 18 October 2021 (UTC)Reply