Talk:La Carcacha/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:12, 18 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):  
    b. (citations to reliable sources):  
    c. (OR):  
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):  
    b. (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):  
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:  

(Criteria marked   are unassessed)

I will crack on with this today! --K. Peake 17:12, 18 April 2023 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • "a song that was recorded by American singer Selena for her third studio album" → "a song recorded by American singer Selena for her third studio album,"
  • "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
  • Reword the emphasized part per it being too repetitive with the body's wording
  • ""La Carcacha" is a Tejano cumbia song that is emblematic of Selena's style," → "It is a Tejano cumbia song that is emblematic of Selena's typical style,"
  • Remove the release year of the song since that is not needed in the lead
  • ""La Carcacha" has continued to receive" → "it has received" and mention ones this includes
  • "in the Broadway musical" → "in the Broadway musical,"
  • ""La Carcacha" triple platinum," → "it triple platinum," and make this the second sentence of the second para instead

Background and inspiration

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  • Change all mentions to A.B. and wikilink on the first instance
  • Remove commas around Joe Ojeda
  • Maybe the musical piece part could be simplified to him proclaiming he was inspired to compose by it?
  • "he would pursue" → "he would pursue with"
  • "A month later," → "A month after the hotel incident," or something similar per this being a new para
  • I think a word more encyclopedic than "chagrin" should be used here
  • Remove comma before Pete Astudillo
  • "yet she remains unperturbed by" → "However, she lacks concern with" as a new sentence to avoid a run-on

Music and lyrics

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  • Audio sample looks good!
  • The first para is slightly out of order; the introduction and countdown parts should be at the end instead
  • "It features the characteristic hip-swaying" → "It features the characteristic danceable"
  • The melodies are not mentioned by the source
  • "The track bears a" → ""La Carcacha" harbors a"
  • "melodic hook" which he believed" → "melodic hook", which he believed"
  • The Burr ref needs to be re-invoked for the second sentence if that is from [14] instead of [15]
  • Remove the usage of ultimately because this adds nothing here
  • Remove the Roiz lyrics praise since this is trivia
  • "on "a junk car"" → "on "a clunker car"" per the source
  • Remove the internal qualities sentence, as this is repetitive and adds nothing
  • "or lack thereof. The song's lyrics championed the joys" → "or lack thereof, championing the joys"
  • "and defends her partner" → "and defending her partner"
  • "with billowing tailpipe smoke" start a new sentence here to avoid a run-on
  • "Tejano music often suffered" → "Tejano music had often suffered"
  • "writing for the Austin American-Statesman, compared its" → "for the Austin American-Statesman, compared the song's"
  • Remove song after the year because speech marks imply this
  • "creates an auditory landscape" → "create an auditory landscape"
  • "Selena's biographer, Joe Nick Patoski, noted that" → "Selena biographer Joe Nick Patoski noted that"

Commercial and critical performance

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  • Retitle to Reception per that being what both of these are types of
  • "It made its debut on" → "It debuted on"
  • "peaked at number sixteen on the" → "peaked at number 16 on the US" per MOS:NUM and to specify this is not Mexico
  • "The song peaked at number 21" → "It peaked at number 21"
  • Mention the date the certification was awarded and remove the "has", also should platinum really be capitalized?
  • Remove overly obvious wikilinks on Miami and the Carribean
  • "which compelled people to dance," → "which compelled them to dance,"
  • "the closing number for her" → "the closing number for Selena's"
  • "engaged from start to finish and" → "engaged throughout and"
  • The source mentions "washing machine", but not the 1995 concert
  • Add "the" before Los Dinos
  • "of the planet.", according to" → "of the planet", according to" and re-invoke the ref because this sentence uses a direct quote
  • "squeezebox instrumental break."" → "squeezebox instrumental break"." per MOS:QUOTE

Legacy and impact

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  • ""La Carcacha" helped increased" → "The song helped increase"
  • ""La Carcacha" helped opened" → "The latter helped open"
  • Start a new sentence at Michael Clark
  • ""La Carcacha" was the inaugural song" → "the former was the inaugural song"
  • Instead change the live medley sentence to writing that it was identified as a great offering for fans by Fernando Zamora of El Norte since it is jumbled at the moment
  • Add a comma after Selena Forever
  • "deeming "La Carcacha" the quintessential" → "deeming it the quintessential"
  • Remove the comma after Cuco
  • None of the plagiarism info is sourced

Credits and personnel

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Chart performance

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  • Retitle to Charts
  • EFE should not be italicised
  • Why are Latin Pop Digital Song Sales and the Mexico chart linked to a section here but neither are in prose?

Certifications

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  • Good

References

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Works cited

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Final comments and verdict

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 Pass now, I had to do some copy editing but good work from you still, of course! --K. Peake 07:04, 20 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for your review! – jona 15:07, 20 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
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