Talk:Lictor mirabilis/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 19:17, 16 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 22:05, 28 August 2024 (UTC)

• "moved to its current status" to "moved to its current genus"
  • Changed.
• Link palpal tibia.
  • I cannot find a page on the palpal tibia. Pedipalp and palpal bulb are linked when they are mentioned, however. Please tell me what you have in mind.
• 'translated "strange".' to 'translated as "strange".'
  • Added.
• "It was...in the field." The second clause here currently refers to "it", implying that the species made her a prolific author. Needs to be reworded.
  • Removed the subclause.
• "the subclade Simonida in the clade Saltafresia in the clade Salticoida" I guess it's hard to avoid because there aren't any names for the ranks, but clade is repeated too much here.
  • Reworded.
• "proposed a subfamily" to "proposed the subfamily"
  • Changed.
• "This overlapped...in 2017" Is this group a clade or something?
  • Not explicitly so. Prószyński uses the term group of genera.
• "have diverged between" to "have diverged from them between"
  • Changed.
• "termed Lictor, after the"
  • Added.
• "and relates to the" The verb here refers to "the species", not 'word that can be translated "strange"'. Needs to be reworded.
  • Reworded.
• "particularly of the copulatory organs"
  • Removed.
• "darker eye field that is covered with white hairs" Source says "colourless hairs".
  • Changed.
• "brown chelicerae, which has" Goes from plural to singular.
  • Changed.
• "south of Ibadan, in 1974" I think the comma is superfluous here.
  • Removed.
• "Other examples" to "Other specimens"?
  • Changed.
• "The spider thrives in forests" Source doesn't support this, cut.
  • Removed.
• "near water, whether streams or rivers" I'd change this to just "near streams and rivers"
  • Changed.
• References spotchecked:

• Wesołowska, Wanda; Russell-Smith, Anthony (2011). "Jumping Spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) from Southern Nigeria". Annales Zoologici. 63 (3): 553–561.
• Maddison, Wayne P. (2015). "A phylogenetic classification of jumping spiders (Araneae: Salticidae)". The Journal of Arachnology. 43 (3): 231–292.
• Bodner, Melissa R.; Maddison, Wayne P. (2012). "The biogeography and age of salticid spider radiations (Araneae: Salticidae)". Molecular Phylogenetics and Evolution. 65 (1): 213-240.

• That's all I have. AryKun (talk) 19:17, 31 August 2024 (UTC)

• @AryKun: Thank you for your comprehensive review. Please look at my comments above. I believe the article is now ready for you to take another look, but would appreciate your thoughts on the wikilink question. simongraham (talk) 00:32, 1 September 2024 (UTC)

• I think it's great now; I couldn't find any better link for palpal tibia either, so I think it's fine as is. Will be passing now. AryKun (talk) 12:10, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

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