Talk:Lola Kenya Children's Screen

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Stfg in topic Copy edit, August 2012

So many problems

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Why do people create an article if they aren't going to do any work on it. This was put up years ago and has had hardly any work done to improve it. It has 8 tags on it. Can that be used as reasoning to delete it? The author clearly doesn't care enough about it to do anything. HotshotCleaner (talk) 19:28, 8 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Please don't use capitals

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Please would editors refrain from entering the names of plays and similar in capital letters. IT IS LIKE SHOUTING (see?). The right way to enter the name of a play is in italics, which you can do like this:

  • type ''Name of play'' to get Name of play

(These are pairs of single quotes, not double quotes). Thank you. --Stfg (talk) 14:22, 3 February 2012 (UTC)Reply

Copy edit, August 2012

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A few notes as I go along:

  • "Origins" section: Removed listing of Ogova Ondego's many roles and accomplishments; it read as if to promote him.
  • The initials MC occur a few times in the article, but they aren't explained. I've tagged the first occurrence.
  • Marketing: "This is the platform on which networking, publicity and marketing of values, products and services targeting children, youth and family are displayed." This is just management-speak. What does it mean in substance? i.e. who does exactly what? Then "Docs for Kids" isn't mentioned in the source. Needs clarifying. Finally, what is meant by "entry point for international productions"?
  • Film Forum:FN15 (this) no longer refers to Lola Kenya Screen. Hence failed verification.
--Stfg (talk) 19:33, 3 August 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Award Winners: "Winners of the 14-Plus Award for the best youth film that was introduced in 2009 ..." is ambiguous: was the winning film introduced in 2009, or the award?
  • Partnerships: "Jan Vrijman Fund/IDFA": first, is IDFA the International Documentary Film Festival Amsterdam? If so, you should expand it and wikilink it. If not, you should expand it to show what it is. Secondly what is the relationship between the fund and the IDFA that justifies writing them together like that?
--Stfg (talk) 14:36, 4 August 2012 (UTC)Reply