Talk:Merry-Go-Round (Ayumi Hamasaki song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:26, 23 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• with a rap → featuring an uncredited rap
• and Avex Entertainment Inc. worldwide. → Insert the "worldwide" after "It was released"
• A majority of them → The majority of them
• vocal performance. Some also highlighted → vocal performance, whilst others also highlighted
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 07:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• CD cover. → Cover artwork used to commercialize physical editions of the single.
• Avex Entertainment Inc → no full labels names in infoboxes
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 07:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Background and composition

• Japanese publication Natalie.mu → Japanese publication Natalie
• would release a new → avoid the word "new"
• and would serve as Hamasaki's → state "the singer's" here, as you've already used her name before
• The track was written by → The recording was written by (word repetition)
• The song was composed by Japanese → It was composed by Japanese (word rep.)
• with minor phrases → containing minor phrases
• It is nowhere stated that Verbal had an uncredited appearance
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Release

• The CD and DVD format featured → use "incorporated" here for alternation
• TeamAyu, which included → TeamAyu, and included
• track list on both discs but featured a bonus interview by Hamasaki → track list on both discs alongside a bonus interview with Hamasaki
• The digital EP included the same track list → You've used "featured the same track list" three full times; alternate here.
• the singles same release date on → the single's release date on
• and for Hamasaki's Countdown → and during Hamasaki's Countdown
• for 2014, Avex Trax → in 2014, Avex Trax
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Reception

• A staff member at Japanese → A staff member of Japanese
• for her album Colours at CD Journal selected it → Remove "at CD Journal" here
• the composition by Komuro → who's Komuro?
• for following the electronic sound. → for portraying an electronic sound
• "Feel the Love", it underperformed → replace "it" with "the track"
• top spot since her single → replace "single" with "recording" for alternation
• first week sales → first-week sales
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Music videos and promotion

• You can simply rename this section to "Promotion"
• for the single; one by Luis Hernandez, the second from Satoru Yokoyama → for the single by Luis Hernandez and Satoru Yokoyama, respectively
• during a time lapse → during a time lapse are shown
• unnamed man → unidentified man
• entire video, and ends → entire video, which ends
• For Yokoyama's video, scenes containing Verbal were only shot → For Yokoyama's video, only shots featuring Verbal were filmed
• filmed, with additional → only filmed, alongside
• and inside a neon-lit → and residing in a neon-lit
• painting the unnamed man → remove "unnamed" and state "painting a man"
• Ref 22 is faded to the text
• before the albums release in July 2 → before the album's release on July 2
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Track list and formats

• flawless ;)

Credits and personnel

• flawless ;)

Charts and sales

• flawless ;)

Release history

• Unlink labels
• Music Cards → Music cards
• Use "scope="row" for countries in the table, please
  •  Done DepressedPer (talk) 13:31, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 10,7% is ok!

Images and others

• Image from the music video brings nothing to the article, so please remove it in accordance with Wikipedia's WP:IMAGE

Links

• No problems here!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
• No dead links! Good job!

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days! Good luck! Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:06, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
  • @DepressedPer: Gladly passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:02, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

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