Talk:Merry-Go-Round (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:55, 21 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• I don't believe the "(stylized as "Merry-go-round")" mention is necessary, but if you find it necessary then by all means leave it be
• "with a rap section by Japanese artist Verbal." --> "with a rap section delivered by Japanese artist Verbal."
• "Majority" --> Add "A" before
• "under performed" --> "underperformed"
• "Countdown live tour." --> Shouldn't this be linked to its article?

Background and composition

• "of English" --> "in English"
• Rest is fantastic!

Release

• "Countdown Concert tour" --> "Countdown live tour"
• "The cover artwork for the single releases were photographed by Gori Kumamoto, and featured Hamasaki in a beige-coloured dress.[4]" --> Since this wasn't particular noteworthy or mentioned by any form of publication, I'd recommended removing it altogether

Reception

• "criticised" --> "criticized"
• Rest is good

Music videos and promotion

• "For Yokoyama's video, he only shot Verbal and his rapping delivery," --> This doesn't read correctly

ON HOLD This is a fantastic article! Great work as always. Carbrera (talk) 01:48, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

I can't believe I'm still seeing you reviewing each other nominations. You say it's fantastic but clearly you haven't checked the references because that section is a mess.  — Calvin999 09:37, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

The bigger issue here is the mess on the references (iTunes and YouTube shouldn't be italicized at a quick glace) and if I recall correctly this one was already open before that huge discussion regarding Britney articles. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:50, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

I'm going to go ahead and fail this. There's been zero activity for the past two weeks. Please renominate it when you get a chance and are less busy. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 23:19, 1 November 2016 (UTC).