Talk:Moria, Middle-earth/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by JavaHurricane in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: JavaHurricane (talk · contribs) 17:03, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


As a fan of J. R. R. Tolkien's wonderful creations, I'd like to GAN-review the article for Moria. -- JavaHurricane 17:03, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks. I hope you will find the article to your liking, though the style must inevitably be neutral rather than enthusiastic! I am able to respond quickly to review comments and am used to working through issues (even on occasion substantial ones) with reviewers. I look forward to your comments. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Chiswick Chap, sorry for the delay! I've been busy lately, but I did go through the article for starters. A few inevitable things here and there, but I hope everything can be fixed. I'll put up my comments shortly. JavaHurricane 09:44, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
I'll fix whatever needs fixed promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:51, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Status

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  Good Article

Criteria

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  • Well-written:
  • Broad in its coverage:
  • it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style): 
  • Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each: 
  • Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute: 

Comments

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  • Could you add a link to "Balrog" in the lede, separately of Durin's Bane?
Done.
  • "Scholars have identified likely sources for Tolkien's Moria: He had studied a Latin inscription [...]" - fix capital after colon.
Done.
  • "The West Gate that crashes closed behind the Fellowship recalled the Wandering Rocks of Greek mythology, and Odysseus's passage between the devouring Scylla and the whirlpool Charybdis." - mention that it is the critics who opine so.
Done.
  • "Its multiple levels of tunnels and halls served, too, as the basis for a variety of computer and board games." - Have served - many such games are still around.
Done.
  • "Their genesis lay in the Poetic Edda, with which Tolkien was familiar; the protagonist in the Skírnismál notes that his quest will involve misty mountains, orcs, and giants." - I think that this sentence should be in "Origins" rather than "Geography".
Moved.
  • Wikilink to Durin VII in the paragraph above "Architecture" redirects back to Moria.
Removed, like his article.

And that's all I have an issue with. On hold temporarily, but I think we can pass this shortly. -- JavaHurricane 11:10, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:52, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
That's it, the. Passing as a GA. A very good read, congratulations! -- JavaHurricane 12:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply