Talk:Nugroho Notosusanto/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 00:52, 12 January 2013 (UTC)

• "Professor" and "Brigadier General" shouldn't be titles toghether, as it's confusing to the layman that "Professor Brigadier General" isn't a rank.
  • How would you organise it? Professor second? Choosing one or the other would be OR, I believe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• "Despite wanting to remain in the military, influence by his father he continued his education," something is wrong with this sentence.
  • Definitely. Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• "... he finished his senior high school eduction, despite wanting to continue with the Army." -- no caps on "Army" here.
  • Debatable, as it could mean the Indonesian Army as an institution (see various articles on the US Army for examples). Decapped though. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• "the University of Indonesia (Universitas Indonesia, or UI)" if it is a non-english term it should be italicized.
  • Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• "By the early 1960s Notosusanto had abandoned his literary career, focusing instead on history." -- this is sort of an abrupt transition. What prompted this?
  • None of the sources say explicitly, although he clearly had much greater interest in history than literature. I've rearranged the section to make it a bit more evident. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:21, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• "as a modern museum showcasing the military's role." -- its role in what?
  • Added — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• Legacy section is very short. Expand or merge into another section.
  • Expanded. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:21, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
• Dup links tool returns no results. Dab links tool shows no errors. No problems with external links.
• All images seem to be tagged and licensed appropriately. There are no apparent problems with stability in the article.

Will await responses. —Ed!^(talk) 04:32, 12 January 2013 (UTC)

• Replied to several. Going back to the sources for two. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
  • Think I've gotten everything. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:02, 12 January 2013 (UTC)

Great work. Passing the article. —Ed!^(talk) 17:11, 12 January 2013 (UTC)