Talk:Nyanyi Sunyi/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by 36.73.44.228 in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 10:21, 4 December 2013 (UTC)Reply

Overalls
  • You really haven't given me much to comment on here, Crisco. The article covers everything you'd expect in terms of background, content and themes. The views of literary critics are communicated really well, and I come away from this article with a good sense of what the collection's like. No concerns on the sourcing - those I can access match what you've written, those I can't access pass the reliability test. Pictures are nice too. I just have three queries on the text, and then this is ready for the Green Symbol of Joy. Great work! Moswento talky 10:11, 5 December 2013 (UTC)Reply
Lead
  • "The collection has been noted as difficult to read, depending on rarely used Malay and Javanese terms and basis in Islamic culture and Malay history." - Something's not quite right with the end of the sentence here.
  • "compactly violent, sharp, and yet short" - Direct quote in need of some attribution
Themes
  • "However, unlike his earlier poems which used it in a similar manner..." - something amiss in this sentence, namely the "but rather as understood" part.