Talk:Nyanyi Sunyi/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 10:21, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

• Hello! Long time no see. I'll take a look at this one, review to appear below shortly. Moswento ^talky 10:21, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

Overalls

• You really haven't given me much to comment on here, Crisco. The article covers everything you'd expect in terms of background, content and themes. The views of literary critics are communicated really well, and I come away from this article with a good sense of what the collection's like. No concerns on the sourcing - those I can access match what you've written, those I can't access pass the reliability test. Pictures are nice too. I just have three queries on the text, and then this is ready for the Green Symbol of Joy. Great work! Moswento ^talky 10:11, 5 December 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "The collection has been noted as difficult to read, depending on rarely used Malay and Javanese terms and basis in Islamic culture and Malay history." - Something's not quite right with the end of the sentence here.

• HOw's this? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:19, 5 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Perfectissimo. Moswento ^talky 09:51, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

• "compactly violent, sharp, and yet short" - Direct quote in need of some attribution

• In the lede, right? Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:19, 5 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Yep and yep. Moswento ^talky 09:51, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

Themes

• "However, unlike his earlier poems which used it in a similar manner..." - something amiss in this sentence, namely the "but rather as understood" part.

• Done
  • Indeedy Moswento ^talky 09:51, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review. I think that's it. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:19, 5 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the replies. I'm now pleased to promote this to GA. Keep up the good work! Moswento ^talky 09:51, 6 December 2013 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review! (Crisco)36.73.44.228 (talk) 10:58, 6 December 2013 (UTC)