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Pronunciation
editIs there a definitive pronunciation of Evra's name? I hear both "EV-ra" and "EEE-vra" quite frequently. Js farrar 17:07, 21 January 2007 (UTC)
- In French, it's Ev-ra. And since he is French... x42bn6 Talk 20:25, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
Siblings
edit26 of them? Questionable source so deleted. Lots of internet rumour but no hard fact.
Evra at Marsala
editIt is untrue he was called the Black Gazelle when at Marsala, he was actually called Blue Chocolate (in Italian cioccolatino azzurro, blue being Marsala's club colour). Two sources in Italian: [1] [2] (the second with a couple photos of him during his time in Sicily). --Angelo (talk) 17:13, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
Arrival in Europe
editThe introduction has an inconsistency about when his family arrived in Europe. Right now it reads:
The son of a diplomat, Evra was born in Dakar, Senegal, and arrived in Europe through Brussels from Senegal when he was six years old. He was raised in Les Ulis, Essonne, France, where he lived with his family from 1984 to 1998 before seizing his first footballing opportunity leading him to Marsala, Sicily, Italy.
First it says he arrived when he was six, but then it says he lived in France from 1984, when he was three. Which is it? Funnyhat (talk) 02:17, 19 May 2010 (UTC)
- According to the APS (Senegal Press Association) he left Senegal when he was 12 months old. I changed it in the article. Saint-Christophe (talk) 00:43, 16 June 2010 (UTC)
- So now we have three potential dates for his arrival in France! Saint-Christophe, would you care to provide a specific reference for your findings? – PeeJay 01:08, 16 June 2010 (UTC)
- [3] Saint-Christophe (talk) 02:22, 16 June 2010 (UTC)
- It says: "Patrice Evra, qui a quitté le Sénégal à l’âge de 12 mois pour Bruxelles" Saint-Christophe (talk) 02:25, 16 June 2010 (UTC)
- So now we have three potential dates for his arrival in France! Saint-Christophe, would you care to provide a specific reference for your findings? – PeeJay 01:08, 16 June 2010 (UTC)
Height (Vandalism revision)
editA quick Google shows his height between 1.71 and 1.75 - I fail to see how the edit to put him at 1.75 was "vandalism"
175cm = 5' - 8 9/10" (feet, inches and tenths-of-an-inch), so rounding up to 5'9 is accurate.
http://www.fifa.com/worldcup/players/player=212246/index.html
Ta, Mongoletsi (talk) 22:10, 17 June 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for that link. Possibly you misread it, but the link you kindly provided gives his height as 1.71cm, and as that is the only reference, that is the one that stays. In case you are interested, the user whose edit was reverted had made a series of vandal edits to Wikipedia. --Technopat (talk) 22:43, 17 June 2010 (UTC)
- Doh! I obviously did misread it. Thanks for checking :) Mongoletsi (talk) 09:50, 21 June 2010 (UTC)
Guinean descent
editIn the article it says "Evra was born in Dakar, the capital city of Senegal, to a Senegalese father of Guinean descent and Juliette, a Cape Verdean mother" with two references provided. However, neither reference says that his father is of Guinean descent (or his mother is of Cape Verdean descent for that matter). I don't doubt it's true but it definitely needs a source to confirm it.TonyStarks (talk) 03:11, 25 May 2011 (UTC)
- Actually, the second source does state his mother is Cape Verdean "Le défenseur de Manchester United (élite anglaise) est né à Dakar d'un père sénégalais et d'une mère capverdienne." And I added a source saying his father is of Guinean descent. — JSRant Away 05:55, 25 May 2011 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk) 19:19, 31 May 2011 (UTC)
I will review this article, but it may take a while. Also, I am having to take the foreign language sources largely on trust. So far, it looks very good and very comprehensive. It seems very well written in general and most problems are fairly minor MOS ones or overlinking. I've done the first two sections so far (I've left the lead till last). My only minor complaint so far would be that it seems to rely largely on what Evra has said about himself for his early life, but this may be unavoidable and is not a problem as far as passing GA.
Personal life
- Overlinking: capital city, culture, values, circumcision.
- These are only linked once in the article. I don't understand. I removed them anyway, though. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- To clarify, WP:OVERLINKING says that common terms should not be linked at all in an article. So these words do not need linking. --Sarastro1 (talk) 09:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- These are only linked once in the article. I don't understand. I removed them anyway, though. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Does ref 4 say that his father was a diplomat? I can't really tell, but my (very poor) French and google translate (although not really doing a good job, to be honest!) suggests not.
- No, but ref 6 is used to reference that his father was a diplomat. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- In that case, you need to change the ref, as "Evra's father was a diplomat and, when Evra was 12 months old, moved to Brussels in Belgium to work at the Senegalese embassy." is covered by ref 4.
- No, but ref 6 is used to reference that his father was a diplomat. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
--Sarastro1 (talk) 09:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Evra was raised on Senegalese culture and values that quickly became "Westernized"": I'm not too sure what this means. Were the Senegalese culture and values westernised, or were Evra's interpretations of them westernised? And why are quotation marks needed here?
- I'd say it was the latter. Quotation marks are used because Evra was quoted as saying this in the reference. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "...and, at the age of ten, returned to Senegal for a short period describing the return as "not a good experience" primarily because he ventured back to the country to undergo circumcision." This is a long sentence. I would suggest breaking it into a new sentence after Westernised.
- "He has not returned to the country since." : This needs to be changed to "as of 2011", per WP:DATED.
- "though the player has stated he never really had an idol" Redundancy: you don't need to say "though the player has stated".
- WP:DATED again: "Presently" and "is currently attempting".
- "Evra developed an interest in football at a young age and was fascinated by the play of former Brazilian international Romário, though the player has stated he never really had an idol. He also earned good grades in school." This does not seem to be referenced.
Early career
- Overlinking: street football, trials
- Same with 'Personal life'. Only linked once. Unlinked street football. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- See above: WP:OVERLINKING. --Sarastro1 (talk) 09:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Same with 'Personal life'. Only linked once. Unlinked street football. JSRant Away 00:02, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- WP:DATED: "who now serves as the vice-president of the club"
- "Evra ventured on trials with several clubs": Slightly odd phrasing. "..went on trials..." would be better.
- Close repetition of "ultimately" at the end of the first paragraph.
- "After failing to convince Paris Saint-Germain officials..." After failing to convince them of what?
- "after possible moves to Serie A clubs Roma and Lazio failed to come to fruition": Wordy. What about "after potential moves ... came to nothing."
- "He left the club following one season after developing friction with the club coach." I don't think this quite reflects the source, which says the coach was not interested in him. Could it be altered a little? --Sarastro1 (talk) 22:21, 31 May 2011 (UTC)
- Missed one earlier: "In 1993, he joined amateur club CSF Brétigny based in nearby Brétigny-sur-Orge. Similar to his stint with Les Ulis, Evra went on trials with several clubs, most notably Toulouse and Paris Saint-Germain. He was ultimately signed by the latter club and converted into a winger. Evra trained at the Camp des Loges for a few months, but was later released.": This needs a ref.
- And Ref 13 says the source is in French, but it isn't. --Sarastro1 (talk) 12:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
Nice
- "He primarily played as a winger..." Not supported by ref 16.
- I'll just switch it to midfielder as that's what the source says. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "team's 3–0 shutout win": Shutout not really necessary.
- "Evra played as either a left winger or a centre forward in the matches.": I'd move this before the list of refs to cover his appearances, as the same ref will cover this. (I'm assuming that his position in the team list covers where he played (I'm a bit rusty on this personally!). If not, it may need another ref to show where he played, and a non-football person may not understand this. Not a problem for me, but worth bearing in mind).
- Changed it to striker as that is what the reference states. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "was promoted to the first team on a permanent basis": This needs a ref, as it is not covered by the match summaries. It would be covered by a list of his appearances for the team such as the current ref 151. (But see below.)
- "Towards the end of the match, reserve left back Jean-Charles Cirilli, who was starting in place of the regular starter José Cobos, suffered an injury, which required the player to be substituted out." The names of the players are not covered by ref 13.
- "He appeared regularly in the campaign and, following the return of Cobos, was even allowed to play in his preferred left wing role.": Needs a ref.
- I inserted this because when I was looking researching Nice's matches during the season, Cobos, the starting left back, and Evra appeared in the lineup together in several matches. Should I list the match reports as references? — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Hmmm... A couple of ways forward here that I have come across on cricket FAs. One way is placing a note to explain this and to give a reference where the reader could check it out for themselves, but I'm not sure sure this is the best way unless there are lots of matches. For example, ref 34 on Wally Hammond, a featured article. The other way is to avoid having a long string of references to the match reports by placing a note and putting all the references in the note. For example, Note 2 on another FA, Herbie Hewett. Either of these would work. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:39, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Done. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- Hmmm... A couple of ways forward here that I have come across on cricket FAs. One way is placing a note to explain this and to give a reference where the reader could check it out for themselves, but I'm not sure sure this is the best way unless there are lots of matches. For example, ref 34 on Wally Hammond, a featured article. The other way is to avoid having a long string of references to the match reports by placing a note and putting all the references in the note. For example, Note 2 on another FA, Herbie Hewett. Either of these would work. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:39, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- I inserted this because when I was looking researching Nice's matches during the season, Cobos, the starting left back, and Evra appeared in the lineup together in several matches. Should I list the match reports as references? — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
Monaco
- "Monaco climatically conceded first place to Lyon in May": Not sure what climatically means here.
- After being in first place for most of the season, Monaco lost first place at the most intense point (climax) of the season. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "The victory allowed Monaco to maintain its position at the top of the table as the club was in a three-way battle with Lyon and Marseille. Monaco climatically conceded first place to Lyon in May, which resulted in the club being declared champions for the first time in its history. Monaco finished the campaign in second place, which merited the club an appearance in the UEFA Champions League." Needs a ref.
- "After the season, Marquez and Jurietti departed the club for Spanish club Barcelona and Bordeaux, respectively. The two were replaced by Gaël Givet and Hugo Ibarra, the latter player joining the club on loan. In the 2003–04 league season, Evra appeared in 33 matches assisting on four goals. Monaco spent six months from September to March in first place, but, like last season, conceded the top spot to Lyon as the season wore on. Evra made his UEFA Champions League debut on 17 September 2003..." None of this has a reference.
- "He appeared in all six group stage matches as Monaco finished in first place.": Needs a ref. (But see below)
- I don't know how to reference this. I know he appeared in all six group stage matches because I personally reviewed the match reports. Do I post all the match reports or do I post the UEFA link that shows Monaco finishing in first place or both? — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Both, probably, but see above about needing to reference multiple match reports.
- I don't know how to reference this. I know he appeared in all six group stage matches because I personally reviewed the match reports. Do I post all the match reports or do I post the UEFA link that shows Monaco finishing in first place or both? — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
--Sarastro1 (talk) 20:52, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Done. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Evra subsequently missed three weeks in the league, but was healthy enough to return for the team's second leg quarter-final tie against Madrid" No ref.
- The reference is in the next link over. I'll put it there too. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- It doesn't mention the three weeks. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:52, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Same with the UEFA matches. He was injured in the Madrid match. After that, I personally looked at every match Monaco played in those three weeks between the first leg of the Madrid match and the second leg of the Madrid match. He did not play in any of them, hence he missed three weeks and returned for the second leg. I guess I will follow the same protocol by grouping the references in a note. — JSRant Away 23:38, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Done. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- Same with the UEFA matches. He was injured in the Madrid match. After that, I personally looked at every match Monaco played in those three weeks between the first leg of the Madrid match and the second leg of the Madrid match. He did not play in any of them, hence he missed three weeks and returned for the second leg. I guess I will follow the same protocol by grouping the references in a note. — JSRant Away 23:38, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- It doesn't mention the three weeks. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:52, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- The reference is in the next link over. I'll put it there too. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- "He was also named to the organization's Ligue 1 Team of the Year." No ref.
- "Despite missing out on playing in UEFA Euro 2004..." No ref.
- Ref 42 is not in French.
- "In the season, Evra was a regular appearing in a career-high 52 matches scoring one goal and assisting on seven as Monaco reached the semi-finals in both the Coupe de la Ligue and Coupe de France. " Needs a ref. However, if you believe that this (and the one above) is covered by the ref at the end of the article, I would be happy to let this go: my preference would be to reference this, but this is not a problem for passing the article.
- "Evra appeared in nine of the ten matches the team contested in the competition." Ref?
- Done.
- "Despite several clubs declaring interest in Evra, Deschamps declared that the player would not be sold. At the start of the 2005–06 season, Deschamps installed Evra as a vice-captain. In September, Deschamps surprisingly resigned as manager of the club due to the club's poor start, despite the media declaring it was because of his constant disagreements with the club president." No ref.--Sarastro1 (talk) 12:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
Note: I am a little concerned at this point by the number of statements without a reference. Anything to do with appearances, I can accept if the intention is that the ref at the end covers it all. However, there are many others in the Nice and Monaco sections which need a ref. I would appreciate if you could check the rest of the article to ensure that everything has a ref before I continue with this review. There do not seem to be too many other issues so far, and all other checks of the references are OK. Prose and comprehensiveness are excellent, it is just the refs that need sorting out so far. --Sarastro1 (talk) 12:24, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Shouldn't be anymore issues. Manchester United section is pretty well-sourced given the club and its huge profile in the media. Same with the national team. Might be a few minor issues. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Everything seems fine now, although I admit my brain is a little fried from checking all the references! But looks good up to here. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:57, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- Shouldn't be anymore issues. Manchester United section is pretty well-sourced given the club and its huge profile in the media. Same with the national team. Might be a few minor issues. — JSRant Away 18:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
2006-08
- "Evra regularly alternated between the bench and the starting eleven to close out the campaign. He finished the half season with 14 total appearances." Needs a ref.
- I used Evra's ESPN profile as my reference. Problem is, the reference doesn't link to what you want it to. In this case, I want it to link to the match-by-match report for Evra in the 2006–07 season. It doesn't. Just goes directly to his profile. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- Ref 74 does not support the match being Evra's debut.
- Did you mean Ref 84? I found a reference saying it was his debut. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- I'm talking about his Champions League debut, and the ref given does not mention Evra.
- Did you mean Ref 84? I found a reference saying it was his debut. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- " the left back went on a streak, in which he started nine consecutive matches." Not supported by ref.
- See your first review comment in this section. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- "The goal was his first-ever in the Champions League and helped progress Manchester United to the semi-finals where the club suffered defeat to the eventual champions Milan." Not supported by ref.
- What isn't? His first-ever goal in the competition? Milan becoming the eventual champions? I took care of both. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
- "He missed his first match of the season against Ukrainian club Dynamo Kyiv in the Champions League in order to be rested for Manchester United's upcoming match against Arsenal. The rest paid off..." Not supported by ref.
- "Though he made 48 appearances in all competitions, Evra failed to score a goal." No ref.
- Done. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
Another note: I'm still seeing the same problems, and a quick scan of the rest of the article reveals similar problems. I am unwilling to keep checking every reference to make sure it is doing what it says and at this moment I am tempted to fail the article on criteria 2a of the GA criteria. However, I am reluctant to do so as this is an extremely well written article which covers the players career exceptionally well. But the reference problems are very distracting for me as a reviewer. If they could be sorted out, this would be a potential future FA, and I am sure that references can be found. The compromise I am willing to make is to place the article on hold for a week. In that time, I would like all the remaining references checking and sorting out. When I look at the article again, all the referencing should be sorted. If I continue to find issues in this area when I look again, I will be forced to fail it as a I have found so many referencing problems. Please take your time checking, and I will not return to the review for a few days to give you a chance to check everything. --Sarastro1 (talk) 21:26, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
- I'll probably get on this on Monday, which is when I have a day off at work. — JSRant Away 01:31, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
2008 - present
- "Evra got into an altercation": had an altercation.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "The defender denied the charges insisting that he hadn't done anything wrong.": Contractions not permitted per MOS; should be had not.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "He began the campaign in similar fashion to last season lifting the Community Shield": Evra personally lifted the shield, or the team won the competition?
- Fixed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "On 18 November, the hearing date for the charges was set for 5 December." This is not supported by the ref.
- Added source. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "returned to the team domestically for its home match, ironically, against Chelsea": ironically is POV.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "as the club cruised to its third consecutive Premier League title": Not encyclopaedic language.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Evra made a memorable statement." and "Evra famously declared": POV, not reflected in source.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "The finals appearance marked Evra's third overall appearance": No ref.
- Shouldn't the previous mention of the two CL final appearances that are already sourced above support this statement? — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "The campaign initially began in erroneous fashion...": Odd phrasing; I understand that he made an error, but this does not really work.
- Agreed. Changed. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "wearing the armband for the first time": ref does not support for the first time.
- Found reference stating it was his first time. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Evra captained Manchester United to a 2–1 win": Ref does not mention Evra at all. However, the next ref does support this. This is careless and unfortunately symptomatic of the referencing throughout. The referencing should be precise and clear.
- The source that does not mention Evra is the source for the 2–1 win. The second source afterwards goes into detail on his captaincy of the team in the match, which is why I put it there to support the aforementioned prose of him being the second Frenchman since Cantona....and so on. I didn't know I had to source something that was going to be confirmed by the source of the ensuing prose. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Early on during the 2010–11 season, Evra was hampered by constant inquiries about what happened at the 2010 FIFA World Cup from both the French Football Federation and the media.": I don't think this really summarises the source, which says he was summoned to an enquiry. And the ref does not mention the media.
- But it does mention Alex Ferguson and the club attempting to protect Evra from the enquiry, which is what I was trying to get at. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- "Evra's hearing with the federation in Paris, which he attended, was held the day after the team's opening 3–0 league win over Newcastle United." Not covered by ref. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- I didn't referenced this because it is fully covered and sourced in the International career section, which is where the information should be. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
Comment: I'm afraid I am still finding referencing problems. I just don't find the referencing good enough for a GA. It is incredibly frustrating as I maintain that the article is very well written, but I wonder how much of this is some kind of OR. I am a little concerned that one of the parts I mentioned above originally said that Evra rested for a game, but once a ref was found it changed to he suffered an injury. Also, other comments suggest that not every part was written using sources. Whether this is the case or not, the referencing is not up to standard. I also still maintain it is a potential future FA, but it needs working at to get it to GA to begin with. I am afraid I will not spend any more time reviewing as it is a little unfair for a reviewer to have to check every ref when so many are not supporting the text. There have been so many examples of missing or wrong refs, this is not good enough for GA.
- That sucks. Appreciate your assistance, though. — JSRant Away 21:12, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Referencing has been a problem throughout. The quality of sources is excellent, however. The lack of refs for some of the text does suggest there may be some OR, but this is not a huge problem in itself.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- A few minor issues in the last section reviewed, but not enough to stop the article and easily solved.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I'm afraid after a lot of work, I have to fail this article, mainly on the problems with referencing. With a little work, it could be a GA, but there is just too much to do.
- Pass/Fail:
I am failing the article, but if you are not happy with the review, you can have it reassessed. Or, once the issues have been addressed, you could renominate at GAN. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk • contribs • count) 18:05, 11 September 2011 (UTC)
This article's been waiting long enough for a review, so I'll give it a shot. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:05, 11 September 2011 (UTC)
Here are the issues I found:
- There are multiple deadlinks. See here.
"Individually, Evra has been named to the" The individually part doesn't really add anything and can be removed.
- "As of 2011, Evra is married to Sandra" I'd remove the as of thing, since if anything does change with that there would be stuff out there on it.
- "He primarily played as a midfielder in the team" on the team.
- "18 matches converting one goal." comma after matches.
- "The player has since credited" can just say Evra or he here.
- "which Monaco surprisingly won 3–1." the surprisingly should be removed, since there's no buildup to why it was such, and it'd be tangential anyway.
Up to Manchester United, will review rest soon. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:10, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for the review, I fixed all of the above.
– HonorTheKing (talk) 10:59, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
Looks good. Here's the rest of my comments:
- The "On 2 March" sentence comes before the "On 26 February" sentence; to keep things chronological swap the order of them.
- "when Evra had an altercation with a Chelsea groundsman during a warm-down" isn't it a cool-down? I could be wrong, just checking since warm-down's a new term to me.
- "Evra, subseqeuntly," take out those commas.
- "Evra was initially place onto the squad" placed
- "He was, subsequently, named the captain" as above.
- "Evra bored the armband in the team's first two matches;" should be comma instead of semicolon.
I'll put the article on hold and will pass when these final issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:12, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
- Done. I fixed the above.
– HonorTheKing (talk) 15:44, 13 September 2011 (UTC)- Everything checks out now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:49, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
Incomplete Article - There is not references about racism.
editWith all the respect, this guy, has been in trouble many times, accusing others of racism.
There is no mention about that in the article. He clearly has a problem with him/other-people skin colour, or is abusing of his colour to attack on other people, for self-interest or similar.
I think this can't be called a good article, when there is absence of this very sad and important topic. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 186.52.56.24 (talk) 14:56, 11 February 2012 (UTC)
- How can you say Evra has been in trouble? If someone racially abused him, he should be commended for speaking up and attempting to put a stop to it. – PeeJay 22:26, 11 February 2012 (UTC)
- You don't understand. Look, I'm seeing sir Evra is abusing of OTHER people, under FALSE or INVENTED claims, abusing of the difference of cultures and skin colours, claiming "racial abuse" because he is just "black", understand know?... I don't know where do you live. But being accused of racism when you are not, hurts a lot in this community. (think of a girl accusing you of raped when you are innocent, just because she is girl you will likely to have lot of troubles.) Also, I think this article has some SELF-INTEREST problems because is not mentioning nothing about this. bot sign this.
- What makes you think Evra's racism claims are false? To be honest, I find your attitude offensive. – PeeJay 13:58, 12 February 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 190.134.5.239 (talk)
- You don't understand. Look, I'm seeing sir Evra is abusing of OTHER people, under FALSE or INVENTED claims, abusing of the difference of cultures and skin colours, claiming "racial abuse" because he is just "black", understand know?... I don't know where do you live. But being accused of racism when you are not, hurts a lot in this community. (think of a girl accusing you of raped when you are innocent, just because she is girl you will likely to have lot of troubles.) Also, I think this article has some SELF-INTEREST problems because is not mentioning nothing about this. bot sign this.
- Something has go wrong and my last comment deleted. I need time to reply again. If you can leave this section intact I can come back later. To resume I'm not offending, vandalism this page. I want to talk, since this is an online-community world-wide I hope you can respect my comments. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 190.134.5.239 (talk) 19:46, 13 February 2012 (UTC)
2010 World Cup
editThe section says that Anelka was removed from the squad on the 21st, which resulted in Evra leading a player revolt on the 20th. Did he have access to a time machine? 81.132.108.246 (talk) 20:03, 24 May 2014 (UTC)
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Champions League Runner-up Medals
editHe has four of these, i forgot to cite sources earlier when i this done under an IP address and they got reverted [4] [5] [6] [7] (That's what makes him the first player to lose four champions league finals) Toyosolanke (talk) 18:49, 2 November 2017 (UTC) Toyo
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