Talk:Phintella parva/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 12:55, 10 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 10:20, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

I should finish the review today. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 10:21, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

• However, retrospectively; it was Retrospectively?
• between 3.5 and 4 mm (0.14 and 0.16 in) long, and yellow "and yellow" doesn't make much sense
• The female is slightly larger than the male. What does this imply?
• difference between this species and other members of the genus => feature of this species
• Unlink species in Taxonomy
• The species name is the Latin for small. Latin for small? or the Latin word for small?
• Unlink genus in Taxonomy
• but was transferred to Phintella in 1983 => then later transferred to Phintella in 1983
• After being transferred to the new genus, the gender of the species name was changed, from parvus to parva Do you mean genus? Sentence is overall confusing
• genus Phintella was raised raised?
• The genus name derives from the genus Phintia, which it resembles. What?
• which was subsequently absorbed into Tylogonus. absorbed?
• It has a body is divided into two main parts Huh?
• a cephalothorax that has a length of between 1.78 and 2.05 mm (0.070 and 0.081 in) and a width of between 1.28 and 1.55 mm (0.050 and 0.061 in), and an abdomen that is between 2.98 and 3.08 mm (0.117 and 0.121 in) long and 1.8 and 2.18 mm (0.071 and 0.086 in) wide. Very awkwardly phrased?
• The spider has a carapace that is longer than it is wide I suggest rephrasing.
• It is a yellow with circular markings grammatically incorrect

I'll stop here. What is apparent is that the article needs to be rewritten. The grammar and prose is particularly subpar. I suggest working on the article prose before renominating. Best, Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 13:10, 11 June 2024 (UTC)