Talk:Rachel, Jack and Ashley Too

Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
Good articleRachel, Jack and Ashley Too has been listed as one of the Media and drama good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Good topic starRachel, Jack and Ashley Too is part of the Black Mirror series, a good topic. This is identified as among the best series of articles produced by the Wikipedia community. If you can update or improve it, please do so.
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June 7, 2021Good article nomineeListed
August 27, 2021Good topic candidatePromoted
Current status: Good article

Miley Cyrus song

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I'm confused, should these songs be mentioned at List of songs recorded by Miley Cyrus? ---Another Believer (Talk) 19:04, 11 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

Never mind, I see two are listed. ---Another Believer (Talk) 19:05, 11 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 00:45, 3 June 2021 (UTC)Reply


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  • Can we fill in the "n.a." in File:Rachel jack and ashley too black mirror.jpg?
  • "is a clone of Ashley O" well, it's a clone of her personality (or brain) in a six inch robotic toy...
  • "personality is modelled on " isn't it deeper than that?
    • Something like this?: For her fifteenth birthday, Rachel receives Ashley Too (Miley Cyrus), an artificial intelligence (AI) robot doll of her favourite pop star Ashley O.Bilorv (talk) 00:37, 5 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "the doll overhears" is it worth that the doll is "reactivated" when overhearing a news report on whether Ashley will "wake up"? It's very "Alexa..."
    • It's a word count thing. I was eliding an important detail which I've now added: Jack returns Ashley Too to Rachel, who chooses not to use it, and six months later, the doll is reactivated by a news report on Ashley O's coma and malfunctions.Bilorv (talk) 00:37, 5 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "stunning the first with Kevin's mouse stunner" stun on repeat...
  • "when the police order them to" -> "when ordered to do so by the police"
  • Don't you normally have a sentence in the main part of each article about it being an anthology series and hence viewed in any order etc?
  • Maybe merge "filming took place in Cape Town, South Africa.[10] Filming went ahead six days per week for five weeks.["" -> "filming took place in Cape Town, South Africa,[10] taking place six days per week for five weeks.[""?
  • "informed" feels a little over-used, maybe switch one out for "inspired" or something else?
  • Is "spinned" right? Not spun?
  • "was filmed in ... of filming" repetitive.
  • ""compared Miley Cyrus's real"" no need to repeat her first name.
  • Our article seems to suggest FreeBritney was one word.
  • "Kesha and her former producer Dr. Luke" links?
  • Furbie->Furby.
  • "Miley Cyrus received acclaim" no need for Miley.
  • 23th -> 23rd.
  • Ref 24 has spaced hyphen, should be en-dash.

That's it, nothing serious. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:51, 4 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Great, all fixed. And so marks the end of the episode articles, at least for now—I'd guess there's a one-in-four chance the show will ever come back—but I'll let you know when Black Mirror itself is up for GA if you're interested. (And in a nice chance occurrence, it's two years to the day since the episode first aired. This fifth one was the only series I watched all in one day, I think, and the article has come a fair way since how it looked at the end of that first day.) — Bilorv (talk) 00:37, 5 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
All good, happy to promote and of course I'd be delighted to help in any way with the main article and subsequent topic, just let me know. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:48, 7 June 2021 (UTC)Reply