Talk:Ratna Sarumpaet/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 22:55, 5 August 2012 (UTC)

This has waited for a review too long; I'll provide one. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:55, 5 August 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks. Not as long as Poedjangga Baroe, but certainly too long. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:46, 5 August 2012 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "As a teenager she moved to Jakarta to study there.[1] She attended Senior High School PSKD Menteng." these two sentences could be combined for better flow.

• Done.

• "She later returned to Indonesia." when?

• Not in source, but rephrased (how's this?)

• Is there a reason why Soeharto is used instead of Suharto?

• Dur. Usual spelling here, but you're right, we should use Suharto on Wikipedia per COMMON

• "She was not elected." did she even get on the ballot? She doesn't show up in the election article so if not, that'd be worth mentioning.

• Would I need a source that specifically says that, or is one that lists the people on the ballot acceptable?

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:27, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Done most of those. One question for you. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:21, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Showing the ballot list works fine; the rest checks out. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 02:33, 9 August 2012 (UTC)

• How's this? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:52, 9 August 2012 (UTC)

• Looks good; article now passes. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:05, 9 August 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 9 August 2012 (UTC)