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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 14:18, 24 June 2016 (UTC)Reply


Hello, I'm MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing this article in the next days. Do not make changes until I say so. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:18, 24 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Infobox

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  • How do you know when it recorded?
  Done Now sourced elsewhere in the article :).
  • Genre?
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You should also add the "Soul" genre in the second source.
  Done I did so now Carbrera (talk) 19:12, 2 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • "American recording artist Prince, under the unpronounceable "Love Symbol", as shown on the album cover". → If I remove the sentences with additional information it makes no sense. Re-write
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  • "the album features more commercial and radio-friendly material". → which album?
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  • "completed a "sensual" cover of Crow's 1996 single "Everyday Is a Winding Road"". → not in the body of the article.
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  • "the album was conceived as a return to mass markets after Prince spent several years without significant public attention." → same issue as previous
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  • "the album features more commercial and radio-friendly material." → one song in the body of the article, not the entire album.
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  • ,achieved modest success, → bias, unless some reviewer as said that.
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  • "peaking at number 63 on the Billboard Hot 100 and becoming the album's only charted song".→ peaked...became...
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Recording and release

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  • However, recording and writing sessions began to be unfruitful, and the entire project was abandoned. → However, as soon as the recording and writing sessions began to be unfruitful, the entire project was abandoned.
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  • Name the studios after the cities and/or states.
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  • and London, England, immediately following the release of his previous studio album, The Vault: Old Friends 4 Sale (1999), released just three months prior. → and London, England, just after the release of his previous studio album, The Vault: Old Friends 4 Sale (1999), three months prior.
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  • See others links above for dates of release.
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  • See one of the links I posted above for more information to add here.
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  • Change the name to "Background and release" since now you have information on the artwork of the album.
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Composition

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  • "Rave Un2 the Joy Fantastic departs from the use of soul on The Vault: Old Friends 4 Sale." → it does depart but not completly. So re-arrange that.
  Done Reworded. Carbrera (talk) 19:17, 2 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "and is his one of Prince's "most pop-oriented" tracks in years" → and is one of Prince's "most pop-oriented" tracks in years
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  • "Tangerine" is a ballad that contains "savvy pop" elements, comparable to Prince's previous efforts → "savvy pop" elements are left to "So Far, So Pleased"; what do you mean with "comparable to Prince's previous efforts" it's not stated nothing like that in the article?
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  • the track was produced to appeal to modern radio and the mainstream crowd. → this is not in the source provided.
  Done Removed.
  • "Segue II" is again a silent track, followed by promotional singles "Man'O'War" and "Baby Knows", the former of which containing "falsetto soul" and the latter featuring contributions from Crow, including her vocals and use of a harmonica. → wrong reference,the review is not on Discogs for sure, also remove that source.
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  • You wave a couple of reviews in the CD universe reference use them, structuring them appropriately and according to individual references. For example: "Rolling Stone Rave Un2 the Joy Fantastic review". United States: Rolling Stone. January 1, 2000: 57. {{cite journal}}: Cite journal requires |journal= (help) → wikilink everything properly.
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Promotion

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  • Unlike Prince's previous albums, he did not embark on a concert tour to promote Rave Un2 the Joy Fantastic. → re-phrase
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  • Internet movie database is not a reliable source, replace it.
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  • Unlike his previous releases, the remix album was not made commercially available, so the album was also unable to chart. → needs source
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Singles

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  • "The remixes also included vocals from Eve". → source
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  • remove the Discogs reference and replace it by any other.
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  • "So Far, So Pleased", featuring guest vocals from Gwen Stefani, and "Hot Wit' U", featuring guest vocals from Eve → "So Far, So Pleased" and "Hot Wit' U", featuring guest vocals from Gwen Stefani and by Eve, respectively.
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  • "Man'O'War" → link it
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Critical reception

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  • Remove from the Album ratings box the reviews that say positive, favorable etc, anyone can change that and sounds bias.
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  • Link music critics → music journalism
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  • the included collaborations → the collaborations
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  • to a symbol." → to a symbol".
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  • trying to recapture the spirit of '99." → same as previous
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  • In the end of this GA review I believe you have at least more two reviews I added the links.
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Commercial performance

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  • A success on → Despite that, it was able to peak at number eight
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  • Billboard's Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs → Billboard's Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Albums
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  • unsuccessful → failed to achieve any notability
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Track listing

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  • All songs written and produced by Prince, except "Everyday Is a Winding Road", which was written by Sheryl Crow, Jeff Trott and Brian McLeod. → needs reference.
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Credits and personnel

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  • Mike Scott - guitar (on #3) → Mike Scott - guitar (3)
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  • That's not the official prince website, remove that reference.
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  • Use " –" instead of "-" (click edit to copy paste properly)
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Charts

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  • Great.
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Certifications

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  • Add accessdate.
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  • Fine
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Release history

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  • The release was not worlwide.
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  Done (This source must be mistaken since every other source says the 2nd, except this one says the following week.)
  Done (Didn't add since it only said 1999) → it says "CD (15 novembre 1999)"

References

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  • Remove all the Discogs references.
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  • robertchristgau.com → Robert Christgau
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  • iTunes, AllMusic, MTV.com → nonitalic
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  • MTV.com → link it once; Amazon.com → only link it once
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Overall GA review

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This sources could and should be used in the article. They are not only reliable but they have valid information, I just googled "Rave Un2 the Joy Fantastic" and all of these appear in the first 10 pages.

  Done Used.
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@MarioSoulTruthFan: I have used this source. However, it is from Billboard so it is listed as such within the article. Carbrera (talk) 19:10, 2 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
  Done Used.
  Done Used.
  • @Carbrera: All in all, this article has some issues regarding not only prose and writing but also references; not to mention lack of information that can be easily found as I have posted just above. I'll put this article on hold (it's not a quick fail) and I will give you 2 weeks to address all of these issues, this includes the expansion of the per said article with not only the references I posted but also others you can easily find. Good luck MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:57, 27 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Oh gosh I completely forgot about this article! I'm gonna be gone in a few days for two weeks; do you think I could have a bit more time going at this article?? Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 15:03, 5 July 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Carbrera: Sure how long? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:21, 5 July 2016 (UTC)Reply
MarioSoulTruthFan, Carbrera, I only see one minor edit in the nearly six weeks since the above exchange. Perhaps a firm deadline could be set for the work to be done, assuming the review hasn't run out of time? Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:34, 15 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
@BlueMoonset: I have been out of town for the last couple of weeks. He missed the first topics and failed to correct the websites. I will warn Carbrera.
@Carbrera: You must address the final issues, otherwise I will fail this article. You have one week, on September 3, 2016 if nothing has been done I will fail the article. Best regards, MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 02:03, 28 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
@MarioSoulTruthFan and MarioSoulTruthFan: I believe I took care of it? Thanks for your leniency. Carbrera (talk) 03:44, 2 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Carbrera: I left some notes with "not done" in this page, please address them, most of them are new. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:55, 2 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 19:19, 2 September 2016 (UTC).Reply
@Carbrera: gladly passing. I would advise you to see the importance of this article in the Pop and R&B/Soul project. Doesn't seem to be "mid-importance". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:23, 3 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
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