Talk:Robert D. Peloquin

Please add your reasons for disputing neutrality

A neutrality dispute was added to this article but the user did not provide any reasons why. I accept your addition, and I will re-evaluate my language, but I need to know what it is that indicated a lack of neutrality. Guylaen (talk) 00:26, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

I added the neutrality tag: the primary issue I was seeking to address was the lead section, which I think contains unsourced peacock terms which should be attributed/quoted or deleted/rephrased. (pioneer, 'set the standard')

An inline citation may have been more appropriate, apologies. Mason7512 (talk) 02:05, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

I thought that phrase was probably it. That's not really a neutrality issue, it's a grammar issue. If I rephrase, will this settle the neutrality dispute? There is no doubt that Peloquin did literally set the standard, as he was the first Strike Force Chief in the USA, and there was no legal standard for a Strike Force before his work there - but I will rephrase to not make it sound peacock. Guylaen (talk) 02:18, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

I have rephrased the introduction. Please review. Guylaen (talk) 02:24, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

I would watch the use of 'pioneer' (as it is directly mentioned in WP:PEACOCK), but I think your rephrasing and contextualization resolved the issue. Mason7512 (talk) 19:09, 2 September 2024 (UTC)