Talk:Simon Favre/GA1
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Mediasponge in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: DCI2026 (talk · contribs) 19:33, 8 February 2013 (UTC) I'll begin this review later today. dci | TALK 19:33, 8 February 2013 (UTC)
Content review
edit- The lead reads well and is of an appropriate length. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
- The last sentence of the 1st paragraph in the lead could be trimmed. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
- I broke this last sentence into two sentences for easier reading, but I wanted to keep the material there. I thought a mention of his multiple "wives" was important, as well as a mention of his move from one location to another, since his entire life centered around just the two general areas: Tombigbee River and Pearl River.
- "reading the Indians into the events" could be phrased differently. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
- Reworded
- The "Ancestry" and "Early life" sections are excellent. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you
- In the "Pearl River" section, a reference would be useful in either the sentence stating "Many Americans felt that West Florida should have been included in the purchase" or the one following it. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
- I've added a citation about Americans feeling Florida should have been included in Louisiana purchase. This was from Guerin's 2009 work, whereas the following sentence comes from the same place as the sentence after it, so both those sentences basically share the 2010 citation.
- There are very few content issues in the article; I will read through it once more and continue to review it based on the remaining GA criteria. dci | TALK 19:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
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- I have reviewed the article further; there are no copyright issues with images, no neutrality issues, no stability issues, and no problematic prose. Therefore, I see no need for a checklist; it's safe to say the article's good to go. Nice work! dci | TALK 03:45, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
- Excellent article. I will review the dates mentioned against the genealogical data I have. There is nothing obviously wrong, but the dates can be checked. The historical data agrees with everything I have read. I am a descendant of Simon Favre by his son Onezan. Mediasponge (talk) 19:34, 17 December 2013 (UTC)