Talk:Sjumandjaja/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tea with toast (talk · contribs) 23:49, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

Issues needing to be addressed before final review

• Please find a source for the date of his graduation from the Cinematography institute.

• Fixed

• The "Directing style" section needs more development. Please find a source for the sentence that I tagged with "citation needed". The statement "His works reflected social realism" needs further elaboration, perhaps with examples of certain films.

• On it. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:16, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

• Because there is no mention of a termination of his marriage to his second wife, adding the simple sentence "...he married a third wife..." suggests that he married her while still being married to the second wife. I presume this is not the case, but being that he had an Islamic upbringing, one might think it is, so some clarification is needed.

• Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:16, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Hopefully these items can be taken care of in a week's time. I will return then to pass my final assessment. Good luck. --Tea with toast (話) 01:01, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Things not necessary for GA, but would be nice to have in the article

• The text mentions his interest in religion in his later years. Do we know what religion? Presumably Islam, since that was his upbringing and is common in Indonesia, but it is ambiguous. Looking at translations of some of the references you have (the ones I could copy and paste into Google translate), the mention of religion is ambiguous, but if you do know about his religion, that would be nice to add.

• Definitely Islam. Its in a couple of the sources. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:16, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Happy editing! --Tea with toast (話) 01:01, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

• How's this? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:48, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

Final review

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Excellent job with all the revisions I requested. I'm very pleased by the growth of the "Directing style" section. Thanks for all your hard work. --Tea with toast (話) 01:29, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review (again)! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:35, 18 June 2012 (UTC)