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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:54, 24 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:54, 24 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Here are the issues I found:

  • "After transferring often, the early 1940s he had" in the early
  Done
  • "head of the court for Native Indonesians there" rm there
  Done
  • "Soeprapto went to directly" went directly
  Done
  • "For fifteen years he worked at various Landraad, " not sure what this is meant to say, reword. maybe say "in various locations" or something like that if that's what is implied.
  Done
  • "the landraad " Landraad
  Done
  • "Although the nascent army was able to hold the peace during riots at the end of 1945, when the Dutch began a major assault on Java." Sentence fragment, needs fixing, plus you use the same ref twice at the end of the sentence, so one can be rm'd.
  Done
  • "In 1950 Soeprapto" comma after 1950.
  Done
  • "In January of 1951" rm of
  Done
  • "In 1953 he" comma after 1953
  Done
  • "then Minister without Folio," not sure what that means; perhaps add something to clarify?
  Done I wikilinked it.
  • Any years on the marriages? I imagine not since they would have been added, but thought I'd ask.
Not in the summary that is online. It could theoretically be in the book, but finding said book would be a pain in the train (very few Indonesian books are reprinted, and initial print runs can be quite small; for example, large publishing houses like Gramedia may only print up 3,000 copies [www.webcitation.org/642MmP31v (indicated here)]

I'll put the article on hold for a week and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:44, 24 December 2011 (UTC)Reply