Talk:St. Joseph's Church, Semarang/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 19:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

Will review within the next three days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 19:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks Dr. B. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:52, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

Lede

• ."As the Catholic population grew, the size of the Gedangan parish diminished as new ones were established." No previous mention of Gedangan. I gather that is the ecclesiastical parish? You might want to mention something about it being within it.
  • Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

A new church

• "The tower was also given a clock and bells during this period; the clock was removed in 1978 since the machinery was broken. Lijden died in 1882, and the Jesuit Joannes de Vries became the parish priest; all of St. Joseph's head pastors since have been Jesuits.[" The two semi colons repeat a bit on me here, can you find a way to avoid this?
  • Nixed one. That should be enough. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
• "using bricks imported from the Netherlands " -you might link bricks to Dutch brick.♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:33, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Didn't know we had an article . Linked — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
• " A multi-story presbytery was begun" -can you reword begun? I never like "was begun".

• Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• Add a space between 1 and August.

• Que? There's a space there. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Must be the font I'm using!♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:39, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• "Also installed that year were carvings depicting the fourteen Stations of the Cross" -do we know the artist?

• Will check. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• No, don't see it anywhere. They're not discussed all that much. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:57, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Growth

• Three Jesuits were sent, - I think there should probably be a dash here rather than a comma.

• Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• I'd rather you stated the church rather than "Another church".♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:48, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• "A third church", to be clear that this is yet another. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Nice article, interesting insight into Catholic history in Indonesia in context too.♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:53, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

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2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:50, 29 June 2014 (UTC)